视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and informal phrases like "we are new generation." Use linking words briefly if needed.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often use Snapchat to capture sunsets and cityscapes because photos help me remember special moments and share them with friends.

建议: Start with a direct statement of preference, then give two specific reasons linked clearly. Avoid contradictions and repetition, and check grammar (singular/plural, articles). Use linking words such as "because" or "so" correctly.

示例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because they feel closer to nature and the air is much cleaner. For instance, in the countryside I enjoy wide open fields and quiet landscapes, whereas the city is often noisy and polluted.

建议: Answer directly and give a concise reason with a specific example. Avoid filler words and repeated words. Use a clear linking phrase such as "because" and provide a short illustrative detail.

示例: I generally prefer views in other countries because some places I visited, like the UAE, were much cleaner and better maintained. For example, the waterfront and city parks in Dubai looked very tidy compared with the polluted areas near my hometown.

× Yes, I do like taking a lot of pictures.

✓ Yes, I like taking a lot of pictures.

The auxiliary 'do' with 'like' is unnecessary in a positive present simple statement. Removing 'do' yields the natural present simple: 'I like'. Suggestion: use 'I like' for habitual actions.

× I use Snapchat a lot as we are new generation and I like to capture every moment of my life especially especially good views.

✓ I use Snapchat a lot because we are the new generation and I like to capture every moment of my life, especially good views.

Use 'because' not 'as' for a clear reason here, and include the article 'the' before 'new generation'. Remove the repeated word 'especially'. Add a comma before 'especially' to separate clauses. Suggestion: proofread for repeated words and include articles when referring to specific groups.

× As I live in urban areas so for me I prefer rural area views more because it's it feels close to the nature and every view looks so clear in urban areas.

✓ As I live in an urban area, I prefer rural views more because they feel closer to nature and the views look clearer there.

Consistency and number agreement: use 'an urban area' (singular) or 'urban areas' (plural), but be consistent. 'Rural area views' is awkward; 'rural views' is natural. 'It feels close to the nature' should be 'they feel closer to nature' to match plural 'views' and avoid unnecessary 'the'. Replace 'so clear in urban areas' with 'clearer there' for clarity. Suggestion: match singular/plural and avoid unnecessary articles.

× As I live in big city here.

✓ I live in a big city here.

The original is a fragment missing the article 'a' and is awkwardly introduced with 'As'. Use a complete sentence: 'I live in a big city here.' Suggestion: include appropriate articles and avoid starting with 'As' unless connecting to another clause.

× Here is more pollution and I am a kind of person who like who like nature most.

✓ There is more pollution here, and I am the kind of person who likes nature most.

Use 'There is' to indicate existence, place 'here' after the clause, and use 'the kind of person' with 'likes' (third person singular agreement). Remove repeated 'who like'. Suggestion: ensure correct subject-verb agreement and remove repetitions.

× I love traveling a lot. When I travel to UAE the views there were beautiful because of the cleanliness around as as in my country the pollution is on high level and there is and the surroundings are not much cleaner.

✓ I love traveling a lot. When I traveled to the UAE, the views there were beautiful because the surroundings were cleaner, whereas in my country pollution levels are high and the surroundings are not as clean.

Tense consistency: use past simple 'traveled' for a completed trip. Use 'the UAE' with the definite article. Replace 'because of the cleanliness around' with 'because the surroundings were cleaner' for clarity. 'Pollution is on high level' is unidiomatic; use 'pollution levels are high'. Remove extra 'as' and 'and'. Suggestion: keep tenses consistent, use articles for country names like 'the UAE', and use natural collocations ('pollution levels are high').

× So for me I prefer the views of of other countries.

✓ So for me, I prefer the views of other countries.

Remove the duplicated word 'of'. Add a comma after introductory phrase 'So for me'. Suggestion: proofread to remove repeated words and punctuate introductory phrases.