视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatical, concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers and tense errors, and give one or two specific examples with linking words. Limit to under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I do. Taking photographs is my passion, so I always try to capture different scenes when I travel. For example, when I climbed a nearby mountain last year, I took wide landscape shots and close-ups of wildflowers to show contrast. I also edit my best photos on my laptop to share with friends.

建议: Give a direct answer (urban or rural), then explain briefly with specific reasons and a linking word. Remove hesitations and unclear references. Keep it coherent and within five sentences.

示例: I usually prefer rural views because they offer natural landscapes and quietness. For instance, I enjoy photographing forests and rivers where there is less pollution and more wildlife. However, sometimes I choose urban views when I want dynamic scenes like city skylines or street life.

建议: Answer directly and avoid vague or exaggerated claims. Use specific descriptive vocabulary and give one concrete example of a place or feature in your country. Limit repetition and filler words.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because it has very diverse landscapes. For example, the northern region has spectacular mountains where I can capture dramatic sunrises, while the coast offers colorful beaches and fishing villages. These varied scenes make photographing at home very rewarding.

× Yes, I do actually taking picture is my passion.

✓ Yes, I do. Actually, taking pictures is my passion.

The original sentence lacks proper auxiliary separation and uses 'picture' singular where plural 'pictures' is natural. Start a new sentence after 'do' and use the gerund phrase 'taking pictures' as the subject. Also use plural 'pictures' because it refers to the general activity of taking photos.

× So whenever I visit anywhere like any uh, mountain or awesome, this time I try to it took different kinds of picture.

✓ So whenever I visit places such as mountains or other awesome spots, I try to take different kinds of pictures.

The original sentence mixes tenses and has awkward word order ('I try to it took'). Use present habitual 'I try to take' to match the context. Replace 'anywhere like any uh, mountain or awesome' with 'places such as mountains or other awesome spots' and use plural 'pictures' for general reference.

× Uh, it's deepened, uh, actually when I see any natural views in urban area this time I prefer to take urban area and I go rural area like there is known SF, so I don't, uh, like it.

✓ Uh, it depends. Actually, when I see natural views in an urban area, sometimes I prefer the urban view, and other times I go to rural areas; for example, I don't like places that are known for being overly crowded.

The phrase 'it's deepened' is incorrect; use 'it depends' in present tense. Use articles ('an urban area') and consistent present tense. Clarify contrast between preferring urban or rural views and correct awkward fragments. Provide an example with correct structure instead of 'there is known SF' which is unclear.

× So actually it's depend on the nature and yeah, they're.

✓ So actually it depends on the nature, and yeah, it does.

Use 'depends' for third person singular subject 'it' (subject-verb agreement). Replace vague plural pronoun 'they're' with 'it does' to refer back to the situation. Ensure verb form matches the subject.

× Definitely, I prefer my continuous because my country is also known as a, uh, queen of the world, uh, like there is, umm, various kinds of landscape and, and, and really my spectacular mountains and, and beautiful.

✓ Definitely, I prefer my country because it is known as a gem of the world; it has various kinds of landscapes, spectacular mountains, and beautiful scenery.

'My continuous' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'country'. 'Queen of the world' is a nonstandard metaphor; 'gem of the world' or simply 'beautiful country' is more natural. Remove repeated filler words and use parallel noun phrases 'various kinds of landscapes, spectacular mountains, and beautiful scenery' for clarity and grammatical correctness.