视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is natural, relevant and expressive with clear feelings, but slightly wordy and has a couple of minor wording issues (e.g., “moonlit lights” is redundant). To improve, shorten or combine sentences for conciseness, replace awkward phrases with precise vocabulary, and add one brief specific example to make it more vivid. Keep answers to a maximum of five sentences.

示例: Yes, I love photographing different views. I’m especially drawn to scenic landscapes—tree‑lined paths at dusk and the warm glow of golden sunlight—which I photograph to capture the mood. For instance, I took a photo of a riverside path at sunset that always helps me feel calm when I look at it later.

建议: This answer is clear, well-structured and specific, using reasons and an example. To reach a higher band, vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., use ‘tranquil’ or ‘unspoiled’) and add a linking phrase to connect reasons smoothly. Also avoid slight repetition of ideas about pollution and buildings by combining them into one concise reason.

示例: I prefer rural views because they feel more tranquil and have cleaner air. In rural areas there is less noise and fewer tall buildings, so the scenery seems unspoiled and relaxing. For example, open fields and scattered trees help me unwind after a hectic week.

建议: The answer is relevant but has grammatical and clarity issues (awkward phrasing: “the country Edinburgh”, and overuse of contrasting markers). Improve by correcting grammar, choosing a clear example country (e.g., Scotland or Edinburgh as a city), and explaining briefly why lower AQI and fewer skyscrapers matter for views. Use a linking word to connect the contrast smoothly.

示例: I generally prefer views in other countries, although my own country is beautiful. This is mainly because I enjoy places with lower air pollution and fewer skyscrapers, which allow more natural scenery. For example, I loved visiting Edinburgh in Scotland for its historic streets and open hills that felt much fresher and more scenic.

× Scenic landscapes like tree lined paths, moonlit lights or golden sunlight always move me and I like to capture those moments so I can revisit the feeling later.

✓ Scenic landscapes like tree-lined paths, moonlit scenes, or golden sunlight always move me, and I like to capture those moments so I can revisit the feeling later.

Hyphenation and word choice: 'tree lined' should be hyphenated as 'tree-lined' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. 'Moonlit lights' is redundant and awkward; 'moonlit scenes' or simply 'moonlight' is clearer. Also add a comma before 'and' to separate independent clauses. Suggestion: use compound adjective hyphens and choose non-redundant nouns. (Grammar problem type ID: 13)

× Those pictures bring some calm emotions within me.

✓ Those pictures bring calm feelings to me.

Preposition and word choice: 'bring emotions within me' is non-idiomatic. 'Bring calm feelings to me' or 'make me feel calm' are natural. Also 'some calm emotions' is awkward; 'calm feelings' or 'a sense of calm' is better. Suggestion: use 'bring...to me' or 'make me feel...'. (Grammar problem type ID: 11)

× I enjoy the peace and cleaner air there.

✓ I enjoy the peace and cleaner air there.

No grammatical correction needed for quantifier usage; sentence is acceptable. No change required. (Grammar problem type ID: 14)

× Rural landscapes have less air and noise pollution and fewer tall buildings, which makes the scenery feel more natural and relaxing.

✓ Rural areas have less air and noise pollution and fewer tall buildings, which makes the scenery feel more natural and relaxing.

Word choice: 'Rural landscapes have less air' is odd because 'landscapes' do not 'have air' in this context. 'Rural areas' is the correct collocation. The rest is fine. Suggestion: use 'rural areas' when referring to places with less pollution. (Grammar problem type ID: 13)

× For example, I love seeing open fields and trees, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

✓ For example, I love seeing open fields and trees, which help me unwind after a busy week.

Subject-verb agreement: 'open fields and trees' is a compound plural subject, so the relative clause should use plural verb 'help' rather than singular 'helps'. Suggestion: match verb number to the compound subject. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× I prefer views in other countries, although my country has beautiful scenic landscapes.

✓ I prefer views in other countries, although my country has beautiful scenic landscapes.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; preposition use 'in other countries' is correct. No change required. (Grammar problem type ID: 11)

× However, I am still more inclined towards countries that have lower AQI levels, fewer skyscrapers like the country Edinburgh.

✓ However, I am still more inclined toward countries that have lower AQI levels and fewer skyscrapers, such as Edinburgh.

Pronoun and phrase structure: 'like the country Edinburgh' is awkward and incorrect. Use 'such as Edinburgh' to give an example, and 'countries that have... and fewer skyscrapers' joins parallel elements with 'and'. Also 'inclined toward' is more common than 'towards' in some varieties but both acceptable; keep consistent. Suggestion: use 'such as' to introduce examples and ensure parallel structure. (Grammar problem type ID: 12)