视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 문법과 문장 연결을 개선하고 불필요한 마침표와 어색한 표현을 고치세요. 주제문을 명확히 하고 이유를 한두 문장으로 간결하게 덧붙이세요. 예를 들어 원인(왜 기록이 되는지)과 감정(사진을 보며 느끼는 것)을 구체적으로 설명하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because photos serve as a visual record of places I visited. For example, when I look at them later, they help me remember the atmosphere and details that I might otherwise forget.

建议: 발음 실수(예: 'abuse' 사용)와 중복된 단어, 문장 끊김을 줄이세요. 주제문을 명확히 하고 이유를 한두 문장으로 정리한 뒤 구체적 예시나 감정을 덧붙이면 좋습니다. 연결어를 사용해 문장 흐름을 개선하세요.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because I usually live in a city and see urban scenery every day. Therefore, rural landscapes feel refreshing and unique, and I enjoy capturing their peaceful atmosphere.

建议: 대명사와 수일치 오류(예: 'familiar to them')를 고치고 더 구체적인 이유와 예시를 제시하세요. 단순 긍정 표현 대신 어떤 점이 '좋다'는지 묘사하면 점수가 오릅니다. 문장 수를 2~3문장으로 유지해 자연스럽게 답하세요.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I'm familiar with the places and appreciate their mix of parks and modern architecture. For instance, the city parks are well-maintained and the skyline looks impressive at sunset.

× I like to take pictures of different views because.

✓ I like to take pictures of different views.

The sentence ends with 'because' but lacks the clause that explains the reason, creating an incomplete sentence (sentence structure error). To fix it, remove 'because' if no reason is given or complete the clause: for example, 'I like to take pictures of different views because they remind me of places I have visited.' Ensure each 'because' is followed by a complete clause.

× When I see that pictures later, it can be a good record for me.

✓ When I see those pictures later, they can be a good record for me.

The phrase 'that pictures' is incorrect; use the plural demonstrative 'those' for plural nouns. Also 'it' does not agree with plural 'pictures,' so use 'they' (subject-verb agreement/number). Ensure demonstratives match number and pronouns agree with their antecedents.

× I prefer abuse in rural areas because I lived I live in urban areas so I I always see urban areas.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I live in an urban area, so I always see urban scenery.

The original uses 'abuse' which is a wrong word (likely mispronounced/mistyped) and has awkward repetition and incorrect noun phrases. Use 'prefer rural areas' and 'I live in an urban area' for clarity. Also 'urban areas' as general noun is fine, but 'urban scenery' avoids repetition. Correct word choice and reduce repetition.

× So when I see the rural areas I feel something special so I want to take a picture.

✓ When I see rural areas, I feel something special, so I want to take pictures.

Repeat 'so' twice and 'the rural areas' is unnatural; use 'rural areas' without 'the' for general meaning. Use plural 'pictures' as taking photos is usually plural. Add commas to separate clauses. Improve flow by avoiding redundant connectors.

× I prefer the view in my country because I'm familiar to them and I think our country's view is very good.

✓ I prefer the views in my country because I'm familiar with them, and I think my country's scenery is very good.

Use 'familiar with' not 'familiar to.' 'Them' should refer to 'views' so ensure plural: 'views' and 'them.' Also 'our country's view' is awkward; 'my country's scenery' or 'its scenery' is more natural. Maintain correct preposition usage and noun agreement.

× It has many parks and modern buildings.

✓ It has many parks and modern buildings.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable. No change needed. Keep as is.

× It looks great.

✓ It looks great.

This sentence is grammatically correct; 'it' refers to the scenery and 'looks' agrees with the singular subject. No change needed.