视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Сократите заполнители (например, «uh», «umm») и используйте правильное время; сформулируйте основную мысль ясно и добавьте конкретный пример. Также избегайте расплывчатых фраз вроде «and so on» — лучше назвать, что именно вы сохраняете (воспоминания, детали мест).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me preserve memories of my trips. For example, when I visited the mountains last year, I photographed the sunrise to remember the colours and atmosphere.

建议: Устраните повторы и грамматические ошибки (например, «it's depend» → «it depends»). Дайте короткое мнение (topic sentence), затем объясните причину и приведите пример, используя связку («because», «for example», «however»).

示例: I like both urban and rural views because it depends on my mood. For example, I enjoy cityscapes when I want lively streets and modern architecture, but I prefer rural scenes when I want peace and natural landscapes.

建议: Избегайте общих выражений («new and so on») и заполнителей. Сформулируйте чёткое сравнение и добавьте конкретные детали о том, что именно вам нравится за границей и дома. Заканчивайте предложение полностью, не оставляйте его незаконченным.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing different architectural styles and cultural landmarks. However, I also appreciate views at home because they feel familiar and comfortable, like the streets and parks I grew up with.

× I like taking pictures of different views because I wanted to save memory of my, umm, travel or trip and so on.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because I want to save memories of my travels and trips.

The student mixed present and past tense: 'I like' (present) with 'I wanted' (past). Use present tense 'want' to match 'I like'. Also 'memory' should be plural 'memories' and 'travel or trip' should be pluralized and simplified to 'travels and trips' for natural English. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use plural forms for general activities.

× I like both views because it's depend on my mood and sometimes I want to go city and sometimes I I like rural areas because rural areas.

✓ I like both views because it depends on my mood: sometimes I want to go to the city and sometimes I like rural areas.

Errors: 'it's depend' should be 'it depends' (third-person singular present), which is a present tense/subject-verb agreement issue. 'go city' is missing preposition 'to the city'. The repeated 'I' is redundant and 'because rural areas' is incomplete. Suggestion: use correct verb form 'depends', include necessary prepositions ('to the city'), and complete the clause for clarity.

× I prefer views in other country umm because in other country we see new architecture, new and so on.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because in other countries we see new architecture and so on.

'other country' should be plural 'other countries' when speaking generally. Also repeat 'in other countries' for clarity or restructure the sentence. Suggestion: use plural when referring generally to locations and avoid fragmentary filler words.

× However, I also enjoy views in my own country because they feel more familiar and.

✓ However, I also enjoy views in my own country because they feel more familiar.

The original ends with an unfinished conjunction 'and.' Remove 'and' to complete the sentence. Also 'views... feel more familiar' is fine. Suggestion: avoid trailing conjunctions and ensure sentences are complete.