视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and use precise vocabulary (e.g., “photographs,” “scenery,” “places,” “preserve memories”). Keep answers to a maximum of 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing scenery when I travel because it helps me preserve memories of new places. For example, I like capturing mountain views and local streets so I can look back and remember how each place felt.

建议: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence naming your preference, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Fix word choice and grammar (e.g., “prefer rural areas,” “it refreshes my mind,” “I can breathe fresh air”). Use descriptive vocabulary for rural scenery.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are quieter and more peaceful. For example, I enjoy wide fields and small villages where I can breathe fresh air and relax, which helps me clear my mind.

建议: Begin with a direct statement of your preference, then give specific reasons and one short example. Correct grammar and phrasing (e.g., “I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy learning about different cultures; I’m already familiar with my own country”). Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy learning about different cultures and landscapes. For example, when I visit a new country I like photographing traditional markets and architecture that are very different from what I see at home.

× I really like taking picture because I like scenery and I enjoy traveling in different place.

✓ I really like taking pictures because I like scenery and I enjoy traveling to different places.

'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because talking about taking photos in general requires plural. 'place' should be plural 'places' for the same reason. Also add preposition 'to' before 'different places' to show movement toward locations.

× I want leave some memory of these places.

✓ I want to leave some memories of these places.

Missing infinitive marker 'to' after 'want' is a sentence structure error. 'Memory' should be plural 'memories' because multiple places produce multiple memories.

× Actually, I prefer shoes rural areas and I enjoy the rural scenery and in that place I will fresh my breath and impact my mind.

✓ Actually, I prefer rural areas and I enjoy the rural scenery; in those places I can freshen my mind and relax.

'shoes' is an incorrect word; remove it. 'in that place' should be plural 'in those places' to match 'rural areas'. 'will fresh my breath and impact my mind' is ungrammatical: use 'can freshen my mind and relax' or 'can get a breath of fresh air and clear my mind'. The corrected version uses natural verbs and correct pronouns and plurality.

× I would choose other countries because I like other countries culture and I'm so familiar with local country so I need to learn about other country.

✓ I would choose other countries because I like other countries' cultures and I'm very familiar with my local country, so I want to learn about other countries.

Possessive punctuation is needed: 'other countries culture' should be 'other countries' cultures'. 'local country' needs a determiner 'my local country'. 'about other country' should be plural 'other countries' to match 'other countries' earlier. Also 'need to learn' is better as 'want to learn' for natural intention; 'so' should join clauses properly.