视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but has some repetition, minor grammar errors and occasional hesitations. To improve, make one concise topic sentence, correct small grammar mistakes, avoid repeating words, and add one specific example to enrich your response. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views when I travel because it helps me preserve memories. For example, on a trip to the coast last year I took pictures of the sunset and the fishing boats, which reminds me of that peaceful evening. Therefore, I often photograph landscapes and local scenes to share with my friends and family.

建议: The response answers the question but contains grammar mistakes, awkward phrasing and a slightly informal tone. Improve by starting with a clear topic sentence, fixing tense and phrasing (e.g., 'used to living'), and giving one concise reason with a brief specific detail. Use linking words like ‘first’ and ‘second’ correctly.

示例: I prefer urban views because I grew up in the city and feel comfortable there. First, I am used to living in busy environments, and second, I enjoy the energy of crowded streets — for instance, I like photographing vibrant markets and modern skylines.

建议: Your answer is honest but includes hesitations, awkward phrasing and a weak word choice like 'reliable' for views. To improve, remove filler words (umm, uh), use clearer vocabulary (e.g., 'comfortable' or 'familiar'), and give one specific reason or brief example. Keep it concise and natural.

示例: At the moment I prefer views in my own country because I haven’t travelled abroad yet and I feel more comfortable with familiar surroundings. For example, I enjoy photographing traditional festivals at home because I understand the culture and can capture meaningful moments.

× I often travel with my boyfriend, families or close friends.

✓ I often travel with my boyfriend, my family, or close friends.

'families' is incorrect because the speaker refers to their own family (singular). Use 'my family' for correct singular reference and include parallel possessive 'my' before 'family' for clarity.

× So I like to photo those landscapes and local scenes so I so I can preserve those memories and look back on them with my loved one later.

✓ So I like to photograph those landscapes and local scenes so I can preserve those memories and look back on them with my loved ones later.

The verb 'photo' is informal and not used as a base verb here; use 'photograph' or 'take photos of'. Also there is a duplicated 'so I'. 'Loved one' should be plural 'loved ones' to match 'them' (plural memories). Ensure verb form and pronoun agreement.

× I prefer views in urban areas, first because I'm used to live in urban areas and I seldom go to rural areas, and 2nd, I'm a person really into those hustles and bustles unlike others because I find it really meaningful to live in this atmosphere.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas, first because I'm used to living in urban areas and I seldom go to rural areas, and second, I'm a person who really enjoys the hustle and bustle, unlike others, because I find it meaningful to live in this atmosphere.

Use the gerund 'used to living' after 'used to' when describing a habitual state. 'Hustles and bustles' is nonstandard; use the fixed expression 'the hustle and bustle' and 'enjoy' instead of 'into' for clarity. Also add 'who' after 'person' for correct clause structure and replace '2nd' with 'second'.

× For now, personally, I prefer views in my own country because I've never been to other countries, umm, and I'm also a person who, uh, cannot step out of my comfort zone.

✓ For now, I personally prefer views in my own country because I've never been to other countries, and I'm also someone who cannot step out of my comfort zone.

Place 'personally' after 'I' for natural word order. 'Person who' is acceptable but 'someone who' sounds more natural here. Remove filler sounds 'umm' and 'uh'. Tenses are correct (present perfect 'I've never been'), so adjust word order and register.

× So I would say my own country's view would make me more comfortable and reliable.

✓ So I would say the views in my own country would make me feel more comfortable and secure.

'My own country's view' is awkward and singular; 'views' (plural) fits context. 'Reliable' is not used to describe a person's feelings; use 'secure' or 'comfortable'. Also 'make me feel' is the natural verb phrase.