视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and choose accurate vocabulary (e.g. 'lighting' not 'lightning'). Use one or two supporting details with linking words and limit to 3–4 sentences. Pronunciation and sentence structure need minor correction to sound natural.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it lets me explore varied perspectives. For example, since I studied photography, I understand lighting and how to reduce unwanted shadows, which helps me capture better images. Therefore I like experimenting with different angles to create more interesting photos.

建议: Clarify and organize your answer: state preference first, then give two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix grammatical errors (e.g. 'architectural views', 'built a long time ago', 'you don't really get in urban areas'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer rural views because they often feature older architecture and unspoiled landscapes. For instance, you can find traditional buildings and wide fields that look especially beautiful at sunset. In contrast, urban areas tend to lack natural scenery.

建议: Be more precise and avoid vague phrases. Begin with a clear statement, then give concrete reasons and an example. Correct grammar and plurality ('other countries', 'landscapes'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Limit to 3 sentences.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering new landscapes and architectural styles. For example, traveling abroad allowed me to photograph historic European streets and tropical coastlines, which are very different from what I see at home. This variety is why I usually choose to explore other countries.

× I learnt photography so I know how lightning works, how you get the shadow away.

✓ I learnt photography so I know how lighting works and how to get rid of shadows.

'Lightning' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'lighting' (illumination). 'How you get the shadow away' is ungrammatical: use the infinitive 'how to get rid of shadows' or 'how to remove shadows.' The sentence also benefits from joining clauses with 'and' for clarity.

× you get to see different perspective and not to mention I learnt photography so I know how lightning works, how you get the shadow away.

✓ you get to see different perspectives, and, not to mention, I learnt photography so I know how lighting works and how to get rid of shadows.

'Different perspective' should be plural 'different perspectives' to match 'you get to see' (general plural noun). Also commas and 'not to mention' need punctuation; using 'and, not to mention,' improves flow.

× So once you take pictures from different views you get to see the picture, the images from different perspective.

✓ So once you take pictures from different viewpoints, you get to see the images from different perspectives.

'Different views' is fine but 'different perspective' should be plural 'different perspectives' to agree with 'images'. 'Picture, the images' is redundant; 'the images' or 'pictures' is better. 'Viewpoints' is a natural alternative to 'views.'

× I actually prefer views in rural areas because once you go to the rural areas you get to see old landscapes, architectural view, things that have been built for quite a while in ancient time and it's so lovely especially during sunset.

✓ I actually prefer views in rural areas because when you go there you get to see old landscapes, architectural views, and structures that were built a long time ago; it's so lovely, especially at sunset.

'Architectural view' should be plural 'architectural views' to match list. 'Things that have been built for quite a while in ancient time' is unidiomatic; use 'structures that were built a long time ago.' Use 'when you go there' instead of 'once you go to the rural areas' for natural phrasing. 'During sunset' -> 'at sunset.'

× You also get to see nature which you which you don't really get in rural areas cause rural area is more of.

✓ You also get to see nature, which you don't really get in urban areas, because urban areas are more built-up.

The original repeats 'which you' and contradicts earlier 'rural areas' vs 'urban areas.' Likely student meant you don't get those natural views in urban areas. The sentence was incomplete 'more of.' Completing it to 'more built-up' fixes meaning. Use commas around the nonrestrictive clause.

× I actually prefer views in other country 'cause I get to see more of the views in other country, in the sense that in my own country I'm not really bothered about the views in my country.

✓ I actually prefer views in other countries because I get to see more variety there; in my own country I'm not really interested in the sights.

'Other country' should be plural 'other countries' or 'another country.' Repeating 'views in my country' is redundant; 'sights' or 'views' once is enough. 'Bothered about' is unnatural; use 'interested in.'

× But when I go out to travel, I want to see a lot of new places, places that have not been seen before.

✓ But when I travel, I want to see many new places, places that I have not seen before.

'Go out to travel' is wordy; 'travel' suffices. 'A lot of' is informal; 'many' is better. 'Places that have not been seen before' is passive and unclear; better to say 'places that I have not seen before' to indicate the speaker's experience.

× I want to see different architecture, different landscape.

✓ I want to see different architecture and different landscapes.

'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match 'different.' Using 'and' joins the two items naturally.