视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 질문에 직접적으로 답했지만 응답이 너무 짧고 연결어·구체적 이유가 부족합니다. 자연스럽고 효과적인 답변을 위해 주제문을 확실히 말한 뒤(예: 이유·예시), 연결어를 사용해 내용을 확장하세요. 또한 문법과 어순을 다듬고 불필요한 반복을 제거하면 더 명확해집니다. 구체적으로는 ‘how often’나 ‘what kind of pictures’ 같은 정보를 덧붙여 답을 풍부하게 만드세요.

示例: I don't really enjoy taking pictures of different views because I prefer experiencing the moment without a camera. For example, when I travel I focus on walking and observing the scenery rather than stopping to photograph it. Therefore I usually take one or two shots only if they seem special.

建议: 주제문을 제시한 것은 좋지만 문장이 불완전하고 어휘 사용이 어색합니다. 구체적인 이유와 예시를 연결어로 덧붙여 문장을 2~4문장으로 구성하세요. 복수형과 관사 사용(예: trees, the scenery)을 정확히 하고, 이유를 더 명확히 제시하면 점수가 오릅니다.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy natural scenery and quiet surroundings. For instance, I love walking among trees and listening to birds, which helps me relax. In contrast, urban scenes often feel noisy and crowded to me.

建议: 답변이 매우 불완전하고 논리적 흐름이 부족합니다. 비교를 할 때에는 명확한 기준(예: 다양성, 색다름, 문화적 차이)을 제시하고 연결어를 사용해 이유를 설명하세요. ‘in other countries there are many’ 같은 모호한 표현을 구체적으로 바꾸고, 예시를 하나 제시하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

示例: I usually prefer views in other countries because they offer more variety and unique landscapes. For example, when I visited Spain I saw historic architecture and coastal cliffs that are different from what I see at home. That contrast makes traveling more exciting to me.

× I just take a picture one time and if I think that is good for me, that's enough.

✓ I just take pictures once and if I think they are good for me, that's enough.

'picture' should be plural 'pictures' when referring to an unspecified number in general; 'one time' is more naturally 'once'; 'that' referring back to pictures should be plural 'they are'. Use plural agreement for pronouns and verbs.

× Of course I prefer views in rural areas, I like nature of scenery, I love tree and.

✓ Of course I prefer views in rural areas; I like natural scenery and I love trees.

Use 'natural' (adjective) with 'scenery' rather than 'nature of scenery'. 'Tree' needs plural 'trees' when speaking generally. The sentence is two independent clauses; use a semicolon or separate sentences.

× Normally I prefer views in other countries because in other countries there are many. Uh, scenery of the front from our country and.

✓ Normally I prefer views in other countries because there are many different sights there compared with our country.

Original is fragmented and unclear. Combine ideas into one coherent sentence: 'there are many different sights there' is natural; 'compared with our country' clarifies contrast. Avoid fragments like 'scenery of the front from our country and.'