视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cümle yapınızı basitleştirip dolgu ifadelerinden (uh, umm, like) kaçının. Doğrudan bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, ardından bir veya iki destekleyici detay verin ve bağlaç kullanın. Örneğin, neden fotoğraf çekmeyi sevdiğinizi ve bu fotoğrafların nasıl yararlı olduğunu somut şekilde belirtin. Ayrıca zaman ve dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin (ör. "when I taking" → "when I take").

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, when I visit a new place, I take photos to capture the light and colors, and later I can look back at them to recall how I felt.

建议: Daha net bir konu cümlesi kurun ve nedenleri iki açık destekleyici cümleyle açıklayın; dolgu kelimelerini çıkarın. Bağlaçlar kullanarak akışı iyileştirin (ör. "because", "and", "so"). Ayrıca dilbilgisi uyumuna dikkat edin ("green areas makes" → "green areas make").

示例: I prefer rural areas because the greenery makes me feel relaxed and peaceful. Also, I enjoy natural scenery since it offers fresh air and quiet surroundings, so I can unwind and take better photos.

建议: Cevabınızı netleştirin: tercihlerinizi açıkça ifade edin (kendi ülkeniz veya başka bir ülke) ve nedeniyle destekleyin. Gereksiz tekrar ve dolgu sözcüklerini çıkartın. Bir karşılaştırma yapacaksanız, 'however' veya 'but' gibi bağlaçlarla mantıklı geçiş sağlayın. Ayrıca anlamsal hata ("I would like to say boats") yerine doğru kelime seçin.

示例: I like the scenery in my own country because it is scenic and peaceful; however, I would also like to visit other countries to experience different landscapes and cultures. For example, travelling abroad would let me see coastal towns and mountains that I can't find at home.

× Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because, uh, when I taking pictures, uh, if I can't remember in this, uh, situation, it will be memories for uh, a few for future and when I taking pictures, it's.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because when I take pictures, if I can't remember a situation, they will be memories for the future.

The student incorrectly used the -ing form 'taking' after the conjunction 'when' where the simple present 'take' is required for habitual actions (Verb + base form). Also 'it will be memories' mismatches number and reference; 'they' agrees with 'pictures' and 'for the future' is the correct phrase. Suggestion: Use simple present 'take' for routines and ensure pronoun number agreement. Remember 'take pictures' -> 'they will be memories for the future.'

× I think I prefer rural areas because the green areas makes me feel comfortable and also it's uh, like natural beauty and when I saw that it makes me umm. Like, I don't know.

✓ I think I prefer rural areas because the green areas make me feel comfortable, and they are like natural beauty; when I see them, they make me feel... I don't know.

The verb 'makes' does not agree with the plural subject 'green areas' (subject-verb agreement). Use 'make' for plural subjects. Also 'it's like natural beauty' should match plural 'they are' or rephrase. 'When I saw' mixes past with present preference — use simple present 'when I see' for general statements. Suggestion: Match verb to subject number and keep consistent tense for general truths.

× I would like to say boats because in my own country, everything, uh, is scenic and, uh, peaceful, but I want to, uh, see another country's, uh, beautiful places or scenery places, uh, I want.

✓ I would like to say my own country because it is scenic and peaceful, but I also want to see beautiful places in other countries.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and possessive forms ('another country's, uh, beautiful places' is awkward) and repeats 'I want'. 'Boats' seems unrelated and likely incorrect word choice; assuming speaker meant 'my own country'. Use clear pronouns: 'it' for 'my own country' and 'other countries' to indicate plural. Suggestion: Simplify: 'it is scenic and peaceful, but I also want to see beautiful places in other countries.'