视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid hesitation and incomplete phrases. Correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g., "I stop and take pictures" or "I usually enjoy the moment and don’t take photos").

示例: I don't really like taking pictures of views. For example, I prefer to enjoy the scene in person rather than photographing it, because taking photos can distract me from the experience. Also, I don't own a good camera, so my pictures often don't look as I want.

建议: Give a clear preference sentence, then support it with specific details and correct linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., plural forms, articles) and avoid repetition. Use descriptive adjectives and explain why urban views appeal to you.

示例: I prefer views in urban areas because the city skyline is very striking. For instance, skyscrapers lit up at night look impressive and show interesting architecture, and tall rooftops offer panoramic views of the city which I find exciting.

建议: Answer directly, then give two clear, specific reasons connected with linking words. Remove filler words and finish your thoughts. Use correct verb agreement and complete clauses.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because they make me feel more connected to my roots. For example, local landscapes often remind me of childhood memories with my family, and I am more familiar with the places, which makes them more meaningful to me.

× I usually enjoy the moment by myself then stop and taking pictures.

✓ I usually enjoy the moment by myself, then stop and take pictures.

The verb following 'stop and' should be in the base form, not the -ing form. Use 'take' after 'stop and' to maintain parallel structure and correct verb form. Also add a comma for clarity.

× Moreover, I don't have a professional camera so I have a has.

✓ Moreover, I don't have a professional camera, so I have a phone.

The original sentence contains a nonsensical word 'has' and is missing a clear noun. Likely the student meant a common object such as 'phone'. Also add a comma before 'so' joining two independent clauses. This fixes article/reference confusion by providing a correct noun.

× I refer views in urban areas, for instance the skyscraper are interesting architect at night.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas; for instance, the skyscrapers are interesting at night.

Multiple issues: 'refer' is incorrect verb choice; 'prefer' is correct. 'Skyscraper' should be plural 'skyscrapers' to match plural subject with 'are'. The word 'architect' was incorrectly used instead of 'architecture' or simply omitted; here removing it and keeping 'interesting at night' is clearer. Semicolon or punctuation improves sentence flow.

× The roof roof tall also give me a lot of use of the cities.

✓ The tall rooftops also give me a lot of appreciation for the city.

Original has repetition 'roof roof' and incorrect word order and agreement: 'give' should match plural subject 'rooftops' (which would take 'give' but sentence needed rephrasing for meaning). Rewriting to 'tall rooftops also give me a lot of appreciation for the city' makes subject, verb, and object clear and grammatically correct.

× I refer views in my own country for a reason, it make me feel more connected.

✓ I prefer views in my own country for a reason; they make me feel more connected.

Use 'prefer' instead of 'refer'. Also subject 'views' is plural, so verb should be 'make' not 'make'—original had 'make' but missing 'they'; include appropriate pronoun or use plural verb. Use semicolon to connect related clauses.

× Uh, the local views may remind me about my childhood with my family and I also have a lot of.

✓ The local views may remind me of my childhood with my family, and I also have a lot of memories.

Sentence was incomplete and used wrong preposition 'remind me about' (better 'remind me of'). The clause 'I also have a lot of' lacked an object; adding 'memories' completes the thought. This corrects structure and clarity.