视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 전체적으로 질문에 잘 답변했으나, 답변이 구어체로 약간 불완전하고 반복(“I like” 반복)이 있습니다. 문장 구조를 더 명확히 하고 연결어를 사용하여 이유와 예시를 덧붙이면 자연스럽고 풍부한 답변이 됩니다. 구체적인 한두 가지 예시(어떤 장면을 찍는지, 어떤 플랫폼에 올리는지)를 추가하세요. 또한 문장 수를 3~4문장으로 유지하면서 중복을 줄이세요.

示例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing landscapes and cityscapes when I travel abroad because they often look different from what I see at home. For example, I like capturing sunrise over mountains or vibrant street scenes and then sharing them on Instagram to show my friends what the place feels like.

建议: 답변의 핵심을 잘 말했으나 문장이 길고 마무리가 불완전합니다(끝맺음 없음). 동일 표현의 반복(‘I like’)을 줄이고 연결어를 사용해 이유를 명확히 제시하세요. 구체적인 설명(예: 어떤 풍경, 활동 때문에 더 좋다고 느끼는지)을 추가하면 설득력이 높아집니다. 문장을 2~3개로 정리해 완결된 느낌을 주십시오.

示例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy wide natural landscapes and clean air. For instance, I love photographing rolling hills and quiet lakes, which makes me feel relaxed and more creative than busy city streets.

建议: 좋은 이유를 제시했지만 문법(‘another countries’, 소유격 일치)과 단어 선택에서 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 간결하게 하고 구체적 예시(어떤 분위기나 장소가 인상적인지)를 덧붙이세요. 또한 연결어로 이유와 결과를 자연스럽게 연결하면 더 설득력 있는 답변이 됩니다.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because each place has a unique atmosphere and culture. For example, I enjoy photographing local markets and historic streets abroad because they show traditions I can't find at home, and I often share those photos with friends to tell them about my experiences.

× I like taking pictures, especially when I travel to other countries, and I like to post what I see on social media and share with my friends.

✓ I like taking pictures, especially when I travel to other countries, and I like posting what I see on social media and sharing it with my friends.

The original mixes 'like to post' with 'like to share' which is acceptable, but for parallelism and naturalness when using 'like' with activities, the gerund (verb+ing) form is common: 'like posting' and 'sharing'. Also include an object for 'sharing' ('it' or 'them') to make the sentence complete. Suggestion: use parallel gerunds and supply the object. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× I think I like rural areas much more because I love when I am in beautiful natural landscape and I like to see those things and I feel fresh when I am in the fresh air and.

✓ I think I prefer rural areas much more because I love being in beautiful natural landscapes; I like seeing those things and I feel refreshed in the fresh air.

Errors: 'I love when I am in beautiful natural landscape' is unnatural; use 'love being in' and plural 'landscapes'. 'I like to see' is acceptable but 'I like seeing' keeps parallel structure. 'I feel fresh' should be 'I feel refreshed' for the correct adjective. Remove the trailing 'and' and join clauses properly. Use semicolon or conjunctions for sentence structure. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× I think I like to see another countries than my country because each country has their own unique atmosphere and I like to feel it and I love to capture that moment and share with my friends.

✓ I think I prefer to see other countries rather than my own because each country has its own unique atmosphere; I like to experience it, and I love capturing those moments and sharing them with my friends.

Errors: 'another countries' is incorrect — use 'other countries' (plural). 'than my country' should be 'rather than my own' for natural comparison. Pronoun agreement: 'each country has their own' should be 'each country has its own' because 'each country' is singular. 'I like to feel it' is vague; 'experience it' is better. 'that moment' should be plural 'those moments' if referring to multiple countries; supply direct objects for 'sharing' ('them'). Grammar problem type ID: 1