视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は個人的な好みを述べていますが、文法や語順の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくくなっています。まずは簡潔なトピック文を作り、続けて理由を1〜2文で具体的に述べる練習をしてください。接続詞（because, so, therefore）や語形（like → like to / memories → memorable/memories）を正しく使い、冗長な語句を削除して5文以内に収めてください。例えば“I prefer to keep memories in my mind rather than taking photos because …”の形で始め、その後に具体例（a special family event, a beautiful sunset）を加えると効果的です。

示例: I prefer to keep memories in my mind rather than taking photos because pondering a moment helps me feel it more deeply. For example, at family gatherings I focus on conversation and emotions instead of using my phone. Therefore I rarely take pictures unless it is necessary.

建议: 良い点は都市の理由を挙げていることですが、語彙・文法ミス（rub→prefer、facility→facilities、people→people are）や冗長表現が目立ちます。最初に明確に答え（I prefer urban areas.）を述べ、その後で理由を2つ程度、具体的な語彙（buildings, restaurants, cozy cafés, busy streets）と接続語（because, also, for example）でつなげてください。最後に短いまとめ文を入れるといいです。

示例: I prefer urban areas because they have diverse restaurants, cozy cafés and interesting buildings to explore. Also, the busy streets and events make the city feel lively and surprising. For these reasons, I enjoy city views more than rural ones.

建议: 答えは自国（東京）への好みが明確ですが、文法（a building → buildings / my own country, Japan / interesting peoples→interesting people）、語順、発音ミスを修正する必要があります。まず短い直接的な答え（I prefer views in my own country, especially Tokyo.）を提示し、具体的な理由（unique architecture, convenient facilities, vibrant street life）を2文以内で述べてください。最後に一文で経験（I have lived there for ten years）を加えると説得力が増します。

示例: I prefer views in my own country, especially in Tokyo. The city offers unique architecture, convenient facilities and energetic streets that never get boring. I have lived in Tokyo for ten years, so I appreciate its variety and familiarity.

× I don't like taking picture because I'm a person who like each a memorial time being embedded in my heart.

✓ I don't like taking pictures because I'm a person who likes to keep memorable moments embedded in my heart.

There are several issues: 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' (singular/plural). The verb 'like' must agree with the subject 'person' (third person singular), so use 'likes' (subject-verb agreement). The phrase 'each a memorial time being embedded in my heart' is ungrammatical and awkward; replace with 'to keep memorable moments embedded in my heart' to convey the intended meaning. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to general activities (taking pictures), ensure subject and verb agree, and simplify complex noun phrases into a clear verb phrase. Grammar problem types: 1 and 27.

× I think each is sometime is a a unique so we I would like to memorize it on my heart directly.

✓ I think each moment is sometimes unique, so I would like to keep it in my heart directly.

Problems: word order and repetition ('is sometime is a a'), incorrect word choice ('each' should be 'each moment' or 'every moment'), and awkward phrasing 'memorize it on my heart' should be 'keep it in my heart'. Suggestion: use clear noun phrases ('each moment'), correct adverb form 'sometimes', and the idiomatic expression 'keep it in my heart'. Grammar problem types: 6 and 26.

× I rub urban areas.

✓ I prefer urban areas.

The student likely intended to say 'prefer' but wrote 'rub'. Use the correct verb 'prefer' to express preference. No preposition is needed here. Suggestion: learn and use common verbs for preferences: prefer, like, enjoy. Grammar problem type: 11.

× The reason why I love the view of urban area is that I the urban area is filled with a building and also interesting facility, restaurant and cozy cafe and also are there are many people are walking around, so I think there is a it is a fear of a surprising.

✓ The reason I love the view of urban areas is that the city is filled with buildings, interesting facilities, restaurants and cozy cafes, and many people are walking around, so I find it exciting and surprising.

Multiple errors: article and singular/plural errors ('urban area' -> 'urban areas' or 'the urban area'), repetition and incorrect articles ('a building' -> 'buildings'), incorrect noun forms ('facility' -> 'facilities', 'restaurant' -> 'restaurants', 'cafe' -> 'cafes'), redundant words ('are there are many people are walking around'), and unclear phrase 'a fear of a surprising' should be 'exciting and surprising' or 'a sense of surprise'. Suggestions: use plural nouns when speaking generally, correct articles ('the' for specific, none for general plural), remove redundant words, and choose appropriate adjectives to express feelings. Grammar problem types: 1, 22, 26.

× I like a building on my own country, Japan.

✓ I like the buildings in my own country, Japan.

Use plural 'buildings' to speak generally and the preposition 'in' for countries. 'a building on my own country' is incorrect: 'a' with singular suggests one building, and 'on' is not used with countries. Use 'in' and plural for general statements. Grammar problem types: 1 and 11.

× I live in Tokyo in particular, and Tokyo is filled with an interesting facility and also an interesting peoples.

✓ I live in Tokyo in particular, and Tokyo is filled with interesting facilities and interesting people.

'an interesting facility' should be plural 'interesting facilities' when speaking generally. 'peoples' is incorrect; use 'people' (plural) without 'an'. Remove unnecessary articles. Suggestion: use plural nouns and correct plural form 'people' for groups. Grammar problem types: 1 and 22.

× So I don't be tired of Abu in Tokyo.

✓ So I don't get tired of being in Tokyo.

'don't be tired' is ungrammatical; use 'don't get tired' or 'am not tired of'. 'Abu' appears to be a mis-typing of 'about' or mistranscription of 'Tokyo'—based on context, use 'being in Tokyo'. Suggestion: use correct verbs for states ('get tired of', 'be tired of') and correct phrasing for location 'being in Tokyo'. Grammar problem types: 6 and 26.

× Uh, even I, uh, spend there for a decade.

✓ I've even spent a decade there.

Use present perfect 'have spent' to indicate an action that started in the past and continues or has relevance now. 'Spend' should be in past participle 'spent' with 'have'. Also place the time expression after the verb phrase: 'spent a decade there'. Suggestion: use present perfect for experiences or durations up to now: 'I've spent', 'I've lived'. Grammar problem type: 5.