视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but reduce fillers (e.g., “umm”), fix small grammar issues (use plural/singular consistently), and vary vocabulary a bit. Also make one strong topic sentence and up to two supporting details using a linking word. For example, say what kinds of scenes you like and why. (English (Mongolia))

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing natural scenes. For example, I often take photos of trees, leaves and rivers because I like capturing textures and tranquil colours when I go outdoors.

建议: Good idea development, but watch repetition (“to the to the”), grammar (e.g., “walk with a friend” not “walk in a friend”), and sentence variety. Use a linking word to connect reason and example. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences. (English (Mongolia))

示例: I prefer the countryside to the city because it is more relaxing and the air is fresher. For instance, at weekends I often walk with a friend in the fields to unwind from the constant noise of urban life.

建议: Answer is relevant but a little repetitive and contains grammar mistakes. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence and one specific supporting detail for each option, using linking words (e.g., “on the one hand… on the other hand”). Avoid repeating the conclusion. (English (Mongolia))

示例: I enjoy views both at home and abroad. On the one hand, my country has wild, untouched landscapes; on the other hand, I loved Paris for its beautiful urban vistas and classic architecture.

× Yes I do. When I, umm, go outdoors I usually take photo of trees, leaves, rivers and the photo of nature.

✓ Yes, I do. When I go outdoors, I usually take photos of trees, leaves, rivers and photos of nature.

You omitted articles and plural marking. 'Take photo' should be 'take photos' because you mean more than one picture (Grammar problem type: 1 singular and plural issue and 22 article errors). Also add commas after introductory clause and between phrases for clarity. Suggestion: use plural 'photos' and include commas: 'When I go outdoors, I usually take photos of trees, leaves, rivers and photos of nature.' Note: response shows combined issue identification but corrected sentence addresses both.

× I prefer the countryside to the to the city because I enjoy the relaxing, serene atmosphere and fresh air.

✓ I prefer the countryside to the city because I enjoy the relaxing, serene atmosphere and fresh air.

You repeated 'to the' and used an unnecessary duplicate. Remove the extra 'to the'. Also 'the countryside' and 'the city' are correct with 'the' as they refer to specific general places. Suggestion: say 'I prefer the countryside to the city.'

× I often go to rural areas at weekends to walk in a friend in the fields and unwind from the noise of urban life.

✓ I often go to rural areas at weekends to walk with a friend in the fields and unwind from the noise of urban life.

The phrase 'walk in a friend' is incorrect. You need the preposition 'with' to indicate accompaniment and the article 'a' before 'friend'. The correct structure is 'walk with a friend.' Suggestion: use 'walk with a friend in the fields.'

× I would prefer both of them. In my country there is a more wild nature but also I have had chance to visit to European countries and I liked Paris a lot, so I would prefer both of them.

✓ I would prefer both. In my country, nature is wilder, but I have also had the chance to visit European countries and I liked Paris a lot, so I prefer both.

Multiple issues: 'a more wild nature' is awkward — use 'nature is wilder' (adjective order and comparative). 'I have had chance to visit to European countries' has errors: missing 'the' before 'chance' and unnecessary 'to' after 'visit'. Also tense consistency: using 'I would prefer both' then 'I would prefer both of them' is redundant; 'prefer both' is sufficient. Suggestions: say 'nature is wilder', 'I have also had the chance to visit European countries', and keep tense consistent by using 'I prefer both.'