视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid awkward phrasing and filler words, correct grammar (e.g., “aesthete” or “aesthetic person”), and keep within 2–4 sentences. Use one linking phrase to add detail (for example “so” or “and”) and give a brief specific example of what you photograph.

示例: Yes, I do. I consider myself an aesthete, so I always carry my phone to capture interesting angles of buildings and landscapes. For example, last week I photographed the sunset reflected on a city river and later posted the best shots on social media.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with one or two specific reasons using linking words (such as “because” or “for example”). Avoid redundant phrases like “in a personal point of view” and aim for precise vocabulary (e.g., “countryside” rather than repeating “rural”).

示例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy wide open spaces and natural scenery. For example, rolling hills and grasslands relax me and improve my mood more than crowded city streets.

建议: Begin with a direct answer, then give two clear reasons linked with connectors like “because” and “also.” Avoid vague phrases such as “for the time being” unless you explain them, and reduce redundancy (don’t list synonyms like “sceneries, views or attractions”).

示例: I prefer visiting attractions in my own country because it helps support local tourism and is usually cheaper and more convenient. However, I might choose international destinations in the future when I have more time and money.

× I do. I think personally I'm a man of aesthetic, therefore I always take pictures by carrying out my phone everywhere I go and I'm to choose the best angles for taking shots and you know, maybe post them later.

✓ I do. I think personally I'm a man of aesthetics, so I always take pictures by carrying my phone everywhere I go and I try to choose the best angles for shots and, you know, maybe post them later.

Incorrect adjective form: 'aesthetic' is an adjective but the student intends the noun 'aesthetics' meaning an interest in beauty. Also phrasing 'carrying out my phone' is incorrect; use the verb phrase 'carrying my phone'. 'I'm to choose' is unnatural; use 'I try to choose' for habitual intention. Suggested improvements: replace 'aesthetic' with 'aesthetics', use 'carrying my phone', and use 'I try to choose' for clarity and correct word choice.

× Well, in a personal point of view I prefer views or sceneries in the countryside, mostly the rural.

✓ Well, from a personal point of view I prefer views or scenery in the countryside, mostly rural areas.

Awkward prepositional phrase and noun form: use 'from a personal point of view' not 'in a personal point of view'. 'Sceneries' is rarely used as a plural noun in English; use 'scenery' as an uncountable noun. 'Mostly the rural' is incomplete; use 'mostly rural areas'. Improve by reordering to 'from a personal point of view' and using 'scenery' and 'rural areas'.

× Now what I like and what I prioritize is sceneries of vast places, for example the grass or the hills.

✓ Now what I like and what I prioritize is scenery of vast places, for example grasslands or hills.

Incorrect noun usage: 'sceneries' should be 'scenery' (uncountable). 'The grass' is specific and unnatural here; 'grasslands' or simply 'grass' fits better. Replace 'the grass or the hills' with 'grasslands or hills'. Keep 'scenery' singular as an uncountable concept.

× It really improves my mood.

✓ It really improves my mood.

This sentence is grammatically correct and uses the present simple appropriately to describe a habitual effect, so no change is needed. Keep as is.

× Well, as a patriot I would say sceneries, views or attractions in my own country.

✓ Well, as a patriot I would say scenery, views, or attractions in my own country.

Use 'scenery' as an uncountable noun rather than 'sceneries'. The rest is fine. Also ensure parallel listing with commas.

× Also, travelling or viewing in my country is much cheaper and more convenient for me for the time being.

✓ Also, traveling or sightseeing in my country is much cheaper and more convenient for me at the moment.

Preposition and word choice: 'for the time being' is acceptable but 'at the moment' is more natural here. 'Viewing' is not the usual verb for sightseeing; use 'sightseeing'. Also use American spelling 'traveling' or British 'travelling' consistently; changed to 'traveling'. Replace 'for the time being' with 'at the moment' for naturalness.

× It might change in the future though.

✓ It might change in the future, though.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; added a comma before 'though' for natural punctuation. Tense 'might change' correctly expresses future possibility. No tense change needed.