视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer more concise, remove filler words (uh), use a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep within 3–4 sentences. For example, state your preference, say why with a specific reason, and give one concrete example.

示例: Yes, I love photographing different views, especially landscapes and scenic places. It helps me relax and sparks my creativity, for example when I capture the golden light over a lake during sunset. Because of this, I often plan short trips specifically to photograph natural scenes.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons and a concrete example. Avoid repeating ideas (unfamiliar/unusual) and vague phrases like “something like this.” Use a linking phrase to show cause and effect.

示例: I prefer rural areas because they offer unique scenes I don't see in the city. For instance, I often photograph villagers working in fields or children playing in open spaces, which creates more authentic and memorable images. Therefore, I travel to nearby countryside whenever I want fresh subjects.

建议: Be more direct: state your balanced preference, then explain with one or two specific conditions or examples. Correct grammar (e.g., "depends on my goal") and avoid extra words. Use a linking word to clarify the condition.

示例: I enjoy photographing views both at home and abroad because I value discovering new scenes. However, it depends on my goal: if I want cultural variety I travel abroad, but if I want convenience or familiar subjects I stay in my country. For example, I photograph local festivals at home and coastal landscapes when I travel abroad.

× 'Yes, I definitely can say that I am a big fan of photographing and uh, especially landscapes and uh, other scenic places photographing, making me feel more relaxed and uh, inspiring and I can capture uh, memorable moments.'

✓ 'Yes, I can definitely say that I am a big fan of photographing, especially landscapes and other scenic places. Photographing makes me feel more relaxed and inspired, and I can capture memorable moments.'

'Errors: incorrect repetition and awkward use of verb+ -ing phrases. Reason: "photographing and uh, especially landscapes and uh, other scenic places photographing" repeats the gerund and creates a run-on. Use a single gerund phrase "photographing, especially landscapes and other scenic places." Also "making me feel more relaxed and uh, inspiring" mixes a participial phrase with an adjective incorrectly; use "Photographing makes me feel more relaxed and inspired." Suggestion: simplify gerund phrases, avoid repetition, and use a main clause with a clear subject (Photographing) + verb (makes) + complements.'

× 'I would say that I prefer rural areas because it's more unfamiliar and unusual for me because I live in the city and I can catch some unusual moments like children playing in the background or something like this.'

✓ 'I would say that I prefer rural areas because they are less familiar to me since I live in the city, and I can capture unusual moments like children playing in the background.'

'Errors: incorrect use of "it's" to refer to plural "rural areas" and awkward comparative phrasing. Reason: "it's" (it is) is singular but refers to plural noun "rural areas," causing a subject-verb agreement/tense reference issue; change to "they are". Also "more unfamiliar" is awkward; use "less familiar" or simply "unfamiliar." Suggestion: ensure verb number matches the noun and choose clear comparative expressions; remove filler phrase "or something like this."'},{