视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 질문에 직접 답하고 이유를 명확하게 말하세요. 불필요한 망설임(uh, umm)과 문장 구조 오류를 줄이고, 주어와 동사 일치를 확인하세요. 예를 들어 주제문(Yes, I like taking pictures of different views.)을 먼저 말한 뒤 전공과의 관련성이나 사진을 좋아하는 이유를 간단한 근거로 덧붙이세요. 문장은 최대 3문장 내로 간결하게 유지하고 연결어(for example, because)를 사용해 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. It relates to my major in media communications, so I often practice framing and composition. Because of that, I try to photograph a variety of scenes whenever I can.

建议: 선호를 먼저 명확히 말한 후 이유와 구체적인 상황(시간 등)을 덧붙이세요. 문장 구조가 혼란스러워 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 'I prefer rural areas, especially in the morning, because...' 같은 형태로 주제문→이유→구체적 예 순으로 말하면 더 명확합니다. 불필요한 반복(what what)과 잘못된 단어(Bill)를 고치세요.

示例: I prefer rural areas, especially in the morning, because they have beautiful natural landscapes and soft light. For example, early sunlight makes fields and trees look warm, which is perfect for photos.

建议: 직접적이고 자연스럽게 비교 표현을 사용하세요. 현재 문장은 어순과 표현 선택에서 어색합니다('more attractive to foreign landscape'). 먼저 선호를 밝히고 이유를 간결하게 제시하세요. 예: 'Although my country is beautiful, I prefer landscapes in other countries because...' 같은 구조가 좋습니다. 구체적인 이유(다양성, 색채, 문화적 차이 등)를 하나 제시하세요.

示例: Although my country has beautiful scenery, I prefer landscapes in other countries because they offer different architecture and cultural elements. For instance, I enjoy photographing historic villages abroad that I can't find at home.

× Uh, yes, I really into, umm, taking pictures.

✓ Uh, yes, I'm really into taking pictures.

The sentence is missing the auxiliary verb 'am' for the present continuous stative expression 'be into'. Use 'I'm really into' to show current interest. Suggestion: include the correct form of 'be' with '-ing' construction for 'be into'.

× It is related my major, uh, which it would it was, uh, media communications, yeah.

✓ It is related to my major, which is media communications.

The original contains extra filler words and incorrect structure. Use the preposition 'related to' and a clear relative clause with 'which is'. Remove redundant 'it would it was'. Suggestion: simplify the clause and use correct preposition 'to'.

× I think they're better about it, but it depending on what what time is it get it for example in the morning.

✓ I think they're better for that, but it depends on the time, for example in the morning.

Several issues: incorrect phrase 'better about it' should be 'better for that' or 'better', and 'it depending' lacks correct verb form; use 'it depends'. Word order 'what time is it get it' is incorrect—should be 'the time'. Suggestion: use subject-verb agreement ('it depends') and correct noun phrase 'the time'.

× I prefer Bill in rural area because they have a beautiful natural landscape and.

✓ I prefer being in rural areas because they have beautiful natural landscapes.

Problems: 'Bill' seems misheard—likely 'being'; 'in rural area' needs plural or an article: 'in rural areas' or 'in the rural area'. Also 'a beautiful natural landscape' should match plurality. Suggestion: use gerund 'being', plural forms 'rural areas' and 'landscapes', and remove trailing 'and'.

× I would like to say that my country has beautiful scenery, but in reality I'm more attractive to foreign landscape because I have seen before and it's more appealing to me.

✓ I would like to say that my country has beautiful scenery, but in reality I'm more attracted to foreign landscapes because I have seen them before and they are more appealing to me.

Errors: 'I'm more attractive to' should be passive 'I'm more attracted to' (correct participle). 'Foreign landscape' should be plural 'foreign landscapes' or 'foreign landscapes' and reference pronouns 'them' and 'they' required. 'I have seen before' needs object 'them' and tense agrees. Suggestion: use correct adjective 'attracted', plural nouns, and include appropriate pronouns for clarity.