视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No and brief reason), then add one specific supporting detail using linking words. Correct grammar (tense, articles, word order) and avoid redundancy.

示例: No, I don't usually take photos of views because I prefer to enjoy the moment. For example, when I visit a scenic lake I focus on the experience and the sounds of nature rather than photographing it.

建议: Give a clear comparison and a direct opinion sentence (I prefer X because...). Use linking words (however, because, while) and provide one specific reason. Reduce hesitations and correct verb forms and repetition.

示例: I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and less crowded. For instance, after I started university in the city, I enjoyed returning to the countryside to relax and watch the clear night sky, which feels calmer than city lights.

建议: Answer directly (I prefer X or both) and give a balanced reason using linking words (also, however, because). Be specific about what you like and avoid vague phrases. Improve sentence structure and vocabulary (landscapes, scenery).

示例: I prefer seeing views in other countries because I enjoy discovering different landscapes and cultures. However, I also love views in my own country because of its beautiful countryside and wide open skies, which feel familiar and comforting.

× I just enjoy the moment and captured with my own eyes and feel the what was I really appealing and enjoying the views so I don't capture it.

✓ I just enjoy the moment and capture it with my own eyes and feel what I really find appealing, so I don't take photos.

The student used 'captured' incorrectly after 'enjoy' and mixed tense and word forms. 'Enjoy' should be followed by a base verb or gerund meaning 'I enjoy experiencing' or 'I capture' in simple present to match habitual action. Also sentence was awkward and contained extra words. Suggestion: use consistent present tense for habits ('I enjoy... and capture' or 'I enjoy... and capturing'), remove unnecessary words, and use 'take photos' for clarity.

× Umm, to be honest, I like but uh, because I rested in the countryside after I go into the university and see university in city.

✓ To be honest, I like the countryside because I stayed there after I went to university and then saw the city.

The student mixed past and present forms incorrectly: 'rested' is past but 'go' is present. The sequence of events requires past tense: 'stayed' (or 'rested') and 'went'. Use 'went to university' and 'saw the city' to show completed actions. Also add article 'the' before 'countryside' for specificity.

× So I feel like more watching to watching to the uh, nights, nights start.

✓ So I prefer watching the nights when they start to shine.

The original repeats 'watching to' and uses incorrect structure. Use 'prefer' (present simple) for a general preference and 'watching the nights when they start to shine' is a natural expression. Remove duplicate words and correct verb pattern.

× They're they're shining and.

✓ They shine at night.

The student used 'They're shining' twice and left the sentence incomplete. For habitual or general statements about nights lighting up, use present simple 'they shine' or present continuous 'they are shining' if describing now. Remove repetition and finish the idea.

× I, I prefer the board of views because I want to travel around the world and watching get different countries.

✓ I prefer a wide range of views because I want to travel around the world and see different countries.

'Watching get different countries' is incorrect. After 'want to' use the base verb 'see' (want to see), not an -ing form. Also 'board of views' is incorrect; use 'a wide range of views' or 'variety of views'. Keep infinitive form after 'want to'.

× And also I really like my own country because there are very, very beautiful, uh, landscapes, countryside skies and too many things.

✓ I also really like my own country because it has very beautiful landscapes, countryside, and skies, among many other things.

The original used 'there are' with a list of nouns in a way that sounds unnatural; use 'it has' to describe features of a country. Also remove filler words and use correct articles: 'very beautiful landscapes' (no comma after 'very'). 'Too many things' is vague; 'among many other things' is more natural. Ensure subject-verb agreement and clearer noun phrases.