视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 응답이 의도를 전달하긴 하지만 문장이 반복적이고 어색한 채움음(uh, so)과 불완전한 문장 구조가 많습니다. 문장을 간결한 주제문으로 시작한 뒤 구체적 세부사항(어디에서, 어떤 풍경을, 어떤 장비나 구도 등)을 한두 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 반복을 줄이고 채움음 대신 연결어(for example, when I travel)를 사용하세요.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I travel domestically or abroad, I often take many photos of landscapes and cityscapes to remember the trip.

建议: 답변이 명확한 주제문을 포함하지만 발화 중 불확실성과 반복(umm, uh, pref no)으로 흐름이 끊깁니다. 먼저 간단히 선호를 분명히 말한 뒤 이유와 구체적인 예시(예: forest, sea, a favorite spot)로 뒷받침하세요. 연결어(so, because, for example)를 정확히 사용하면 논리성이 좋아집니다.

示例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I enjoy natural environments. For example, I like photographing forests and seaside landscapes since they feel calm and offer interesting textures and colors.

建议: 주제문은 있으나 이유 설명이 모호하고 채움음이 많아 설득력이 떨어집니다. 명확한 이유(새로운 문화, 다른 풍경, 색채나 빛의 차이 등)를 구체적으로 제시하고, 한두 개의 세부 예시를 덧붙이세요. 문장은 최대 3–4문장으로 정리해 자연스럽게 말하세요.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because traveling abroad exposes me to different landscapes and cultures. For instance, coastal towns in Spain and mountain villages in Japan have unique colors and architecture that I find refreshing.

× Yes, I like to take a picture of different views.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views.

Use the gerund (verb + -ing) after 'like' to describe a general preference. Also use the plural 'pictures' and plural 'views' when speaking generally about multiple scenes. Suggestion: say 'I like taking pictures of different views.'

× I like traveling abroad and domestic trip.

✓ I like traveling abroad and taking domestic trips.

Parallel structure and correct noun forms are needed. Use the gerund 'taking' for both activities and plural 'trips' for general statements. Suggestion: use parallel gerunds: 'traveling abroad and taking domestic trips.'

× So uh, so when I went to, I went on a trip to Korea or overseas, I took a lot of pictures and and I.

✓ So when I went on a trip to Korea or other countries, I took a lot of pictures.

Remove redundant words and incomplete clause. 'Went to' and 'went on a trip to' are repetitive; 'overseas' should be clarified as 'other countries.' The sentence must be completed with a main verb and object. Suggestion: keep it concise: 'When I went on a trip to Korea or other countries, I took a lot of pictures.'

× Yeah, I prefer umm, I pref no, I don't prefer umm city city views to rural views because I like natural environments, so I like the scenery of umm, of forest or uh, or the sea.

✓ I don't prefer city views to rural views because I like natural environments, such as forests or the sea.

Avoid repetition and hesitations; use 'forests' (plural) and parallel nouns. 'Such as' is clearer than 'of' in this context. Maintain negative preference structure: 'I don't prefer city views to rural views.' Suggestion: say 'I don't prefer city views to rural views because I like natural environments, such as forests or the sea.'

× So umm, I prefer to uh watch the.

✓ So I prefer to enjoy the scenery.

The original sentence is incomplete. 'Prefer to watch the' lacks an object. Use a complete verb phrase like 'enjoy the scenery' to convey the idea. Suggestion: 'I prefer to enjoy the scenery.'

× I prefer views from different country to views in umm in my country because umm, I like traveling and when I go to go abroad I feel like it's very umm.

✓ I prefer views from different countries to views in my country because I like traveling, and when I go abroad I feel refreshed.

Use plural 'countries' and correct comparative structure 'prefer A to B.' 'Go to go abroad' is redundant; use 'go abroad.' 'Feel very umm' is vague—use 'refreshed' to complete the thought. Suggestion: 'I prefer views from different countries to views in my country because I like traveling, and when I go abroad I feel refreshed.'

× It's very umm, refreshing and, and.

✓ It feels very refreshing.

Remove filler words and repetitions; 'it feels very refreshing' is a complete, natural sentence. Avoid trailing 'and' without continuation. Suggestion: 'It feels very refreshing.'