视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 用词与语法需修正，回答应更自然、简洁并保持句子数量在5句以内。注意动词形式（enjoying → enjoy / photographed → photograph）、拼写（park 前需冠词）、连贯性和逻辑（clarify“still treat photography of course”表述不清）。建议先给出主题句，然后用一两句具体细节（地点、频率、器材、目的）并用连接词衔接。

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of everyday scenes. I often photograph a nearby park to capture seasonal changes, and sometimes I take pictures of flowers and people in my neighborhood. I usually use my phone to quickly record moments and then choose the best shots to share with friends.

建议: 总体表达较好，内容明确且有具体原因。不过口语中避免使用缩写（'cause）和口语化过强的词语，句子可以更紧凑。可加入一两个连接词使逻辑更连贯，并用更准确的词汇（e.g. crowded instead of overcrowded if appropriate）。

示例: I prefer rural areas because I am sensitive to noise and air pollution. Big cities like Shanghai often feel crowded and hazy. In contrast, the countryside offers fresh air, lush greenery and a peaceful atmosphere, so I like walking through the fields while listening to music.

建议: 内容混乱且有多处语法与词汇错误（如Skypescriptors、不自然片段），句子不连贯，未直接回答“own country or other countries”这一对比问题。建议先直接表态（e.g. I prefer scenery in other countries or my own country），然后给出具体理由与例子，避免无意义的插入，保持句子简短清晰。

示例: I prefer natural scenery, whether at home or abroad, but I especially enjoy visiting rural areas in other countries for their untouched landscapes. For example, I like traveling to countryside regions where I can breathe fresh air and see wide-open fields, which helps me relax and reduce stress.

× Yes, I enjoying taking photos of different views of my daily life.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views of my daily life.

句中動詞應使用原形或適當時態。原句中主語“I”後應接動詞原形“enjoy”，而非現在分詞“enjoying”。建議把“enjoying”改為“enjoy”。

× I often photographed nearby park to capture seasonal changes and sometimes still treat photography of course and people around my neighborhood.

✓ I often photograph the nearby park to capture seasonal changes, and sometimes I still treat photography as a hobby, photographing landscapes and people around my neighborhood.

原句使用“photographed”為過去式，但句中有頻率副詞“often”，表示習慣性動作應用一般現在時，故改為“photograph”。另外有多處不清楚的詞語和結構（如“still treat photography of course”不通順），需調整為“treat photography as a hobby”並補全主語“I”。同時“nearby park”前要加定冠詞“the”。建議使用一般現在時描述經常性行為，並重寫不通順片段。

× I often photographed nearby park to capture seasonal changes and sometimes still treat photography of course and people around my neighborhood.

✓ I often photograph the nearby park to capture seasonal changes, and sometimes I still treat photography as a hobby, photographing landscapes and people around my neighborhood.

“nearby park”需在可數名詞前加定冠詞“the”表示特指附近的那個公園。建議在“park”前加“the”。

× I usually use my phone to quickly bracket those moments and pick the best shots to share with my friends.

✓ I usually use my phone to quickly capture those moments and pick the best shots to share with my friends.

“bracket”不是此處常用動詞，搭配“moments”應用“capture”或“catch”。此外“to quickly bracket those moments”語義不清，改為“to quickly capture those moments”。（該改動屬於動詞選擇與動名詞用法調整。）

× I prefer rural areas 'cause I'm so sensitive to noise and air pollution, and big cities like Shanghai often feel hazy and overcrowded.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I'm sensitive to noise and air pollution, and big cities like Shanghai often feel hazy and overcrowded.

口語縮寫“'cause”在正式或考試答題中不夠恰當，應使用完整連詞“because”。另外“so sensitive”雖可接受，但省略“so”更中性。建議使用正式連詞。

× The countryside may not be very modern, but it offers fresh air, lush greenery and peaceful surroundings, so I enjoy walking through the fields while listening to music.

✓ The countryside may not be very modern, but it offers fresh air, lush greenery, and peaceful surroundings, so I enjoy walking through the fields while listening to music.

原句語法基本正確。此處僅建議在列舉三項時加入必要逗號以清晰表達（牛津逗號可選）。屬於標點與連接詞使用建議，句子本身無重大語法錯誤，保留原時態和語序。

× I prefer raw scenery.

✓ I prefer natural scenery.

“raw scenery”是非慣用搭配，應使用“natural scenery”或“untouched scenery”。這是詞語搭配和詞彙選擇問題，建議用更地道的表達“natural scenery”。

× There's a saying, familiar places have no scenery, right?

✓ There's a saying: familiar places have no scenery, right?

原句需在引出諺語時用冒號或分號分隔，且“familiar places have no scenery”語序可接受。主要是標點和連接處理建議，使句子更清晰。

× Having lived in Shanghai for so long, surrounded by its modern Skypescriptors, unnaturally year for the authentic rural views, fresh air, vast greenery and quiet environment helps me relax.

✓ Having lived in Shanghai for so long, surrounded by its modern skyline, I yearn for authentic rural views: fresh air, vast greenery, and a quiet environment that help me relax.

原句有多處詞彙和結構錯誤（如“Skypescriptors”、“unnaturally year”不合常規）。將“Skypescriptors”改為“skyline”，“unnaturally year”改為“I yearn for”，並重構句子以符合語法。另外主句中“helps me relax”中的動詞應與複數主語“views, fresh air, vast greenery, and a quiet environment”一致，故改為“help me relax”。建議使用正確詞彙並重寫以清晰表達意思。

× And it is my anxiety.

✓ And it makes me anxious.

原句“it is my anxiety”語義不自然。應用動詞短語“make someone anxious”來表達“這讓我感到焦慮”。因此改為“It makes me anxious”更符合英語表達習慣。