视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and organized: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid hesitations and filler words, correct grammar (e.g., 'which does not have'), and limit to 3–4 clear sentences. Also give a brief reason or example of what you like to photograph. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I do. I used to take a lot of photos with my iPhone 8 Plus because its camera captured a unique aesthetic. However, I now use an iPhone 16, which I feel produces different colors, so I sometimes change my editing style to recreate that look.

建议: Make a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details and correct grammar. Avoid long, confusing clauses; use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Mention particular subjects you enjoy photographing in urban areas (e.g., architecture, street scenes) to add specificity.

示例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy photographing architecture and city life. For example, I like capturing old façades, busy streets with cars, and interesting shop fronts, which give my photos a strong sense of place.

建议: Clarify and correct factual and grammatical errors, and stay on topic. Begin with a direct statement, then give relevant, specific examples. Avoid unclear references ('Sia', 'Syria nearby') and explain what you photographed in those countries. Keep sentences short and logical using linking words like 'for example' and 'so'.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer scenery I don't have at home. For example, when I visited Georgia and Turkey I photographed colorful old streets, seaside vistas, and historic buildings that are unlike the scenes in Kazakhstan.

× I do actually, I used to take pictures a lot when I had my iPhone 8 plus because it has uh, the camera that catches uh, something with a rare aesthetic and now, uh, I'm using iPhone 16, which not, which does not has that aesthetic, but anyways.

✓ I do, actually. I used to take pictures a lot when I had my iPhone 8 Plus because it had a camera that captured a rare aesthetic, and now I'm using an iPhone 16, which does not have that aesthetic, but anyway.

Errors: incorrect present participle phrasing and verb forms. 'has' should be past 'had' to match 'when I had my iPhone 8 Plus'; 'catches' is awkward — 'captured' fits past reference; 'which does not has' is ungrammatical: after 'does' use base form 'have'. Suggestions: keep tense consistency (past for past ownership), use base verb after auxiliary 'does', and avoid filler words for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:10

× Well, most of my life I lived in urban areas, meaning I'm pretty used to take pictures of buildings of cars around buildings of this city aesthetic that we used to have in my hometown and none now in the capital.

✓ Well, for most of my life I lived in urban areas, so I'm pretty used to taking pictures of buildings, cars, and the city aesthetic that we used to have in my hometown but not now in the capital.

Errors: incorrect verb form after 'used to' and issues with prepositions and article omission. 'I'm pretty used to take' should be 'I'm pretty used to taking' because 'used to' + preposition requires gerund. Also missing commas and parallel structure: list items should be separated and coordinated. 'none now' is incorrect; use 'but not now'. Suggestions: use gerunds after 'used to', maintain parallel lists, and include appropriate conjunctions. Grammar problem type ID:8

× So I think that I prefer taking pictures in urban area.

✓ So I think that I prefer taking pictures in urban areas.

Error: singular/plural mismatch. 'area' is general here and should be plural 'areas' to match earlier context 'urban areas' and to express general preference. Suggestion: use plural when speaking about a category or general locations. Grammar problem type ID:1

× I think I like the views of other countries. For example, I've been in Georgia and Turkey, and both of that countries had Syria nearby.

✓ I think I like the views of other countries. For example, I've been to Georgia and Turkey, and both of those countries had Syria nearby.

Errors: incorrect preposition and pronoun. Use 'been to' with countries rather than 'been in' when referring to visits. 'both of that countries' is wrong; use 'both of those countries' (plural demonstrative). Suggestions: use correct prepositions for travel ('been to'), and match demonstrative pronoun to plural noun ('those'). Grammar problem type ID:12

× We lived and I used to take a lot of photos with Sia that we don't unfortunately have in Kazakhstan.

✓ We lived there, and I used to take a lot of photos of sites that we unfortunately don't have in Kazakhstan.

Errors: unclear pronoun reference and word order. 'with Sia' is unclear — likely intended 'sites'. 'that we don't unfortunately have' has adverb placed awkwardly; move 'unfortunately' before 'don't' or 'we don't have in Kazakhstan' with 'unfortunately' earlier. Suggestions: correct the noun 'sites', place adverbs in natural position (before main verb), and add 'there' after 'We lived' to clarify location. Grammar problem type ID:26