视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct, accurate, and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds ("umm", "uh"), correct grammar ("helps me capture", not "capturing"), and use relevant vocabulary. Provide one specific supporting detail and link it with a simple connective. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views because they help me capture memorable moments. For example, when I travel I often photograph landscapes, such as mountain ranges or coastal sunsets, because these images remind me of the atmosphere and emotions of the trip.

建议: Answer clearly and use correct grammar and linking words. State preference directly, then give concise reasons with specific details. Correct mistakes ("I prefer rural areas", "when I take photographs there"). Avoid vague phrases like "it's great place to be on the wind"—use clearer expressions.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because I love countryside scenery. When I photograph fields, rivers and old cottages I feel relaxed, and the fresh air helps me unwind after busy days.

建议: Give a direct answer then support it with clear, specific reasons and a linking word for contrast. Fix grammar and word choice ("I prefer views in my own country because they are more familiar and connected to personal memories"). When mentioning the other option, be explicit about what you like there.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because they are more familiar and connected to personal memories, such as family trips and local festivals. However, I also enjoy views in other countries because they often show different history and cultural scenes that I find interesting.

× I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me capturing memorable moments and I appreciate in changing skins.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me capture memorable moments and I appreciate changing scenes.

The verb 'help' should be followed by the base form 'capture' not the -ing form; this is a common verb + infinitive/base pattern. 'Appreciate in changing skins' is ungrammatical: 'appreciate' is followed by a noun or -ing form without a preposition, and 'changing skins' is the wrong collocation for photography — 'changing scenes' fits the context. Suggestion: use 'helps me capture' and 'appreciate changing scenes.'

× For example, when I travel I often photograph and landscapes because at my spares makes me more feel unique.

✓ For example, when I travel I often photograph landscapes because it makes me feel unique in my spare time.

The original sentence has several structure problems: an extra conjunction 'and' is incorrect ('photograph landscapes' is correct), 'at my spares' is ungrammatical — likely intended 'in my spare time', and word order 'makes me more feel unique' is wrong; correct order is 'makes me feel unique.' Suggestion: simplify to 'I often photograph landscapes because it makes me feel unique in my spare time.'

× Actually I prepared in rural areas because I love countryside scenery.

✓ Actually I prefer rural areas because I love countryside scenery.

The verb 'prepared' is incorrect; context requires 'prefer' to express preference. Also 'in rural areas' is acceptable but 'prefer rural areas' is more natural without 'in.' Suggestion: use 'prefer' to match meaning of choice.

× When I take it photographs there I always feel relaxed and comfortable.

✓ When I take photographs there, I always feel relaxed and comfortable.

The phrase 'it photographs' incorrectly inserts the pronoun 'it' before 'photographs.' Remove 'it' since 'photographs' is the noun direct object. Suggestion: say 'take photographs there.'

× Also, it's great place to be on the wind after busy days.

✓ Also, it's a great place to be in the wind after busy days.

The original lacks the indefinite article 'a' before 'great place.' Additionally 'on the wind' is incorrect preposition use; correct is 'in the wind' to indicate being outdoors and feeling the breeze. Suggestion: 'it's a great place to be in the wind.'

× OK, I prefer them my own country because there is more familiar and own personal experience, for example family trips and local community journey.

✓ OK, I prefer my own country because it is more familiar and I have personal experiences there, for example family trips and local community journeys.

The pronoun 'them' is incorrect and should be removed. 'There is more familiar' is ungrammatical; use 'it is more familiar.' 'Own personal experience' needs an article or possessive and plural 'experiences' fits examples. 'Journey' should be plural 'journeys' to match examples. Suggestion: 'I prefer my own country because it is more familiar and I have personal experiences there.'

× But sometimes I appreciate the scenario. It shares history and culture experience.

✓ But sometimes I appreciate the scenery; it shows historical and cultural aspects.

'Appreciate the scenario' is odd collocation — 'scenery' is likely intended. 'Shares history and culture experience' is awkward; use 'shows historical and cultural aspects' or 'reveals history and culture.' Suggestion: use nouns and verbs that collocate naturally: 'appreciate the scenery' and 'it shows history and culture.'