视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers, and explain specifically what kinds of views you prefer and why using linking words. Also correct verb forms and unclear phrases (e.g. “eyes. It always overlooks something”). Aim for 2–4 coherent sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets and cityscapes to capture the colours and atmosphere. These pictures remind me of how a place looked and how I felt at that time.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain reasons. Replace vague words (“yield”) with accurate vocabulary and remove hesitations. Give one or two specific examples of rural scenery to support your preference and how it affects you.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are calmer and more natural. For instance, I enjoy photographing mountains and fields of wildflowers, which help me relax and forget city noise. Also, the wide-open landscapes offer interesting compositions for photos.

建议: Answer directly and correct grammar (use conditional form properly). Give a concise reason and a specific example of what you are curious about when visiting other countries. Use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

示例: If I had to choose, I would prefer views in other countries because I am already familiar with my own country. For example, I like seeing different architectural styles and landscapes abroad, such as coastal cliffs or historic city centres, which feel new and exciting to me.

× Yes, I like take photos of different views.

✓ Yes, I like taking photos of different views.

The verb 'like' followed by another verb requires the -ing form (gerund) when expressing a general preference. Use 'taking' instead of 'take'. Suggestion: practice patterns 'like + -ing' (e.g., 'I like swimming').

× Umm, it can produce a good memory for me.

✓ Umm, it can create good memories for me.

'Produce a good memory' is awkward and 'memory' is typically plural when referring to experiences. Use 'create' and plural 'memories' to sound natural. Suggestion: prefer collocations like 'create memories' or 'bring back memories'.

× You know, eyes.

✓ You know, the eyes can miss things.

The original fragment 'You know, eyes.' is incomplete and unclear. Adding a verb and article clarifies meaning. Suggestion: make sure each sentence has a subject and verb to form a complete thought.

× It always overlooks something.

✓ They always overlook something.

If referring to 'eyes' (plural), the pronoun must match plural subject; 'it' and 'overlooks' are singular. Change to 'they' and 'overlook'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun agrees in number with its noun.

× I like rural areas, you know, the urban areas, uh, the buildings.

✓ I prefer rural areas; urban areas have many buildings.

The original is a run-on and unclear. 'I like rural areas' and then a clearer contrasting clause improves coherence. Suggestion: use concise contrasts like 'I prefer X; Y is...'.

× I didn't get the, the beauty of that.

✓ I don't see the beauty in them.

The examiner asked a general preference (present time), so present tense is appropriate. 'Didn’t get' (past) is inconsistent. Also 'that' should refer to plural 'areas' so 'them' fits. Suggestion: match tense to the context and use correct pronoun number.

× I like the mountains, the yield and the flowers and that could make me feel relaxed.

✓ I like the mountains, the fields and the flowers, and they make me feel relaxed.

'Yield' is incorrect word choice here; likely 'fields' intended. 'That' is vague and should agree with plural subjects: 'they'. Use present simple for general statements. Suggestion: choose correct nouns and ensure pronoun agreement.

× If I have have to choose when it would be the other countries,

✓ If I have to choose, it would be other countries,

The sentence has repetition 'have have' and awkward word order 'when it would be'. For a hypothetical preference use 'If I have to choose, it would be other countries.' Suggestion: remove duplicate words and use standard conditional word order.

× because you know, I'm familiar with my country, the mountains, they people, everything.

✓ because, you know, I'm familiar with my country, the mountains, the people, and everything there.

'They people' is incorrect; should be 'the people'. Also add 'there' to refer back to the country. Suggestion: ensure correct article 'the' with plural nouns and use 'there' for location references.

× I'm curious about how other countries looks alike.

✓ I'm curious about what other countries are like.

'Looks alike' is ungrammatical. Use the phrase 'be like' to ask about characteristics: 'what X is like'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'countries look' (plural) if using 'look', but better phrasing is 'are like'. Suggestion: learn set phrase 'be like' for descriptions.