视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g., articles, verb forms, and sentence fragments).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me preserve memories. For example, I often photograph cityscapes and landscapes so that I can look back and remember places I visited. This hobby also helps me notice small details I would otherwise forget.

建议: Answer directly with a clear preference (or state you like both), then give two specific contrasting reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words and complete your sentences. Correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘night lights’ not ‘Knights’).

示例: I like both urban and rural views. In cities, I enjoy the night lights and modern architecture because they feel vibrant; whereas in rural areas, I appreciate peaceful landscapes and fresh air which help me relax.

建议: State your preference clearly and support it with precise reasons. Use linking words (for example, 'on the one hand', 'on the other hand') and avoid hesitations. Use correct nouns and pluralization (e.g., 'buildings', 'night lights').

示例: On the one hand, I love views in my country because it has beautiful mountains and untouched nature. On the other hand, I enjoy views in other countries, such as China or the United States, for their impressive cityscapes and distinctive architecture, especially at night.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because it's very enjoyable for me, for my memory and I in the future if I want to remember my memory, I would like to see that photos. It's really enjoyable for me.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because it's very enjoyable for me and for my memory, and in the future if I want to remember moments, I would like to look at those photos. It's really enjoyable for me.

The original sentence had several issues: 'that photos' is incorrect because 'that' should be 'those' to match plural noun (demonstrative adjective) — this falls under incorrect use of adjectives or pronouns but mainly involves demonstrative form; 'remember my memory' is awkward and redundant; 'look at those photos' is the correct collocation. The sentence also needed conjunctions and punctuation to join clauses clearly. Suggestion: replace 'that photos' with 'those photos', use 'look at' rather than 'see', and change 'remember my memory' to 'remember moments' or 'recall memories'.

× I prefer both because sometimes I need to relax in the umm city or I need to relax in the nature.

✓ I prefer both because sometimes I need to relax in the city or relax in nature.

Use of prepositions: English uses 'in the city' but normally 'in nature' without the definite article. 'In the nature' is incorrect. Also repeating 'I need to' is unnecessary; simplify structure. Suggestion: remove 'the' before 'nature' and streamline the clause to maintain natural phrasing.

× I prefer both because in the city the Knights of the lighting of the buildings are so important and the.

✓ I prefer both because in the city the night lighting of the buildings is very important.

This sentence has article and noun form problems and a fragment at the end. 'Knights' is a mispronunciation or miswording of 'night's' or 'night'; the correct phrase is 'night lighting' or 'the night lighting'. Subject-verb agreement: 'lighting' (singular noun) takes 'is', not 'are'. Also remove the trailing 'and the.' Suggestion: use 'the night lighting of the buildings is very important' or 'the lighting of buildings at night is very impressive.'

× I prefer both because my country is a mountain country, a natural country that I, that I like mountain countries and uh, other countries like China, like United States, It's very good for me because of the buildings, uh, night light B buildings.

✓ I prefer both because my country is a mountainous, natural country; I like mountain countries. Other countries, like China and the United States, are also appealing to me because of their buildings and night lighting.

Multiple issues: 'a mountain country' is acceptable but 'mountainous' is more natural (adjective form) — this is incorrect use of adjectives. 'Like United States' needs the definite article 'the United States' — article error. 'It's very good for me' is awkward; better 'are also appealing to me'. 'night light B buildings' appears to be a pronunciation error; correct phrase is 'night lighting' or 'buildings at night'. Suggestion: use 'mountainous' or 'mountain country', add 'the' before 'United States', and replace unclear fragment with 'night lighting'.