视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words ("umm") and unclear phrases. Also correct grammar and word choice (e.g., "I always take photos of clear blue skies and beautiful night scenes"), and limit to 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I do. I especially like photographing clear blue skies and vibrant night scenes because the colors and lights are very calming. For example, I often capture city skylines at dusk to show how the lights gradually appear, which gives me a lot of joy.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence and one clear reason with a supporting example. Fix grammar (e.g., "urban areas suit me better") and avoid vague expressions like "lots it gives me" or "fond of to have a big work." Use linking words such as "because" or "so" to connect ideas, and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer urban views. I find cityscapes inspiring because the tall buildings and busy streets make me feel ambitious and motivated; for instance, seeing office towers reminds me of career opportunities in big companies.

建议: Answer directly and give a specific reason with a complete sentence. Avoid unfinished sentences and clarify vocabulary (e.g., "I prefer views in other countries because the skies are cleaner"). Use linking words like "because" and provide a short example or contrast.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because the air is often cleaner and the skies look clearer. For example, when I travel abroad I enjoy unobstructed mountain and coastal views that I rarely see at home due to pollution.

× I think that I would always take the view of the blue sky and the stunning nights that would.

✓ I think that I would always take pictures of the blue sky and the stunning night views.

The original sentence uses awkward and ungrammatical phrasing: 'take the view of' and 'the stunning nights that would.' Replace with 'take pictures of' and 'stunning night views' to use correct noun phrases. This fixes sentence structure errors and produces a natural present conditional idea. Suggestion: use 'take pictures of' + noun phrase and keep modifiers directly after the nouns. (Grammar problem mapped to 'Verb in the present participle form' because the original contains incorrect verb-noun combinations and present participle confusion; however the core issue is sentence structure and verb phrase choice.)

× That was quite interesting and what made me feel relaxed is the process that it also gave me a lot of joy.

✓ That was quite interesting, and what made me feel relaxed was the process because it also gave me a lot of joy.

The original mixes past and present verb forms and has a relative clause 'what made me feel relaxed is' followed by 'that it also gave me a lot of joy,' causing tense and structure confusion. Change 'is' to 'was' to match past context ('That was quite interesting'), and replace 'that' with 'because' to show cause. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use clear subordinators for cause (because, since). (Grammar problem mapped to 'Sentence structure errors' because multiple clause linkage and tense inconsistency create an unclear sentence.)

× For me, the urban areas is much more suitable to my heart.

✓ For me, urban areas are much more suitable to my heart.

'Urban areas' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is.' Also omit the definite article 'the' unless referring to specific urban areas. Suggestion: ensure subjects and verbs agree in number; use 'urban areas are' for plural general statements. (Grammar problem mapped to 'Subject-verb agreement errors'.)

× This is because lots it gives me the sense of hope.

✓ This is because they give me a sense of hope.

The phrase 'lots it gives me' is ungrammatical. If referring to 'urban areas' use the plural pronoun 'they' and 'give' to match. Also 'a sense of hope' is the natural collocation. Suggestion: replace vague 'lots' with a clear noun or pronoun and ensure verb agreement. (Grammar problem mapped to 'Sentence structure errors'.)

× Probably I think this is because I am a person who is fond of to have a big work.

✓ Probably I think this is because I am a person who is fond of doing big work.

The fixed phrase is 'fond of' followed by a gerund (doing), not 'fond of to have.' Also 'big work' is awkward; 'doing big work' or 'big projects' is better. Suggestion: after 'fond of' use verb+ -ing or a noun: 'fond of doing' or 'fond of big projects.' (Grammar problem mapped to 'Incorrect use of prepositions' because 'fond of to have' misuses the preposition 'of' with an infinitive.)

× Other countries what made me think that is in my own country the pollution is really a big problem, so the sky was not so clean and I am more fond of the.

✓ Other countries. What made me think that is that in my own country pollution is a big problem, so the sky is not very clean and I prefer other countries.

The original is fragmented and mixes tenses and pronouns. Break into two sentences: 'Other countries.' Then explain cause: 'What made me think that is that...' Use 'pollution is a big problem' (present tense general fact) and 'the sky is not very clean.' End with a clear preference: 'I prefer other countries.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments, keep tense consistency for general facts (present simple), and complete comparative statements. (Grammar problem mapped to 'Sentence structure errors'.)