视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Shorten and focus your response, use a clear topic sentence, and add a specific detail or brief reason using a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., “really like” twice) and correct minor phrasing to sound more natural.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because I always carry a small camera when I go out. For example, I often take pictures of cherry blossoms and tree-lined streets, which help me remember places I visited. (This answer is three sentences, clear, and specific.)

建议: Start with a concise topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons linked clearly. Improve grammar (use present perfect or simple present correctly) and choose natural expressions (e.g., “countryside” or “natural landscapes”). Keep within 3–4 sentences.

示例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I grew up in a city and find the constant concrete tiring. For instance, I enjoy wide fields, forests, and quieter scenery, which feel more relaxing and refreshing. (Two sentences, clear reason and specific examples.)

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Correct grammar (e.g., “I have lived in my country since I was a child”) and article use (“Japan” without “the”). Give one specific contrast with linking words like “because” or “for example.” Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I have lived in my tropical country all my life and want different scenery. For example, I like Japan’s cooler climate and seasonal landscapes, such as snowy mountains and autumn foliage, which are very different from my home. (Two sentences, clear contrast and specific examples.)

× Sure, I really like taking pictures of different views because I always bring my little camera in my bag when I go out.

✓ Sure, I really like taking pictures of different views because I always bring my little camera in my bag when I go out.

No correction needed. Sentence is grammatically correct: present simple for habits and appropriate articles.

× And when I see good views like trees or cherry blossoms, I really like to take pictures of them and I can see the picture in the future.

✓ And when I see good views like trees or cherry blossoms, I really like to take pictures of them so I can look at the pictures later.

Original 'I can see the picture in the future' is awkward and not idiomatic. Use present simple for habitual preference ('I really like to take pictures') and 'so I can look at the pictures later' communicates intended meaning. This fixes clarity and naturalness.

× I definitely prefer views in the rural areas because I live in the urban area since I was a kid so I get tired of the skyscrapers and all the concrete buildings.

✓ I definitely prefer views in rural areas because I have lived in an urban area since I was a kid, so I got tired of the skyscrapers and concrete buildings.

Use 'in rural areas' (no 'the') and 'in an urban area' (article for one area). 'Since I was a kid' requires present perfect ('have lived') for a situation continuing to the present; however, speaking of becoming tired over time can use past simple 'got tired'. Choose consistent tense: here corrected to 'have lived' and 'got tired' to express continuous residence and resulting feeling. Also removed redundant 'all the' and improved noun phrase 'concrete buildings'.

× So I really like rural area which got big fields and woods and the other natures.

✓ So I really like rural areas, which have big fields and woods and other natural landscapes.

Use plural 'rural areas' or 'the rural area' with article; 'which got' is incorrect — use 'which have' (subject-verb agreement and present simple). 'The other natures' is uncountable/unclear; use 'other natural landscapes' or 'other natural features' to be idiomatic.

× So I prefer views in other countries because I think that I'm staying too long in my country since I was a kid.

✓ So I prefer views in other countries because I think that I've stayed in my country too long; I've been here since I was a kid.

'I'm staying too long' is incorrect for a past-to-present duration — use present perfect 'I've stayed' or present perfect continuous 'I've been staying' depending on emphasis. Also split into two clauses for clarity: duration 'I've been here since I was a kid' correctly expresses ongoing situation.

× So I'm getting tired of the views and I really like the views of the Japan because it's more cold and the the nature is quite different from my country.

✓ So I'm getting tired of the views here, and I really like the views of Japan because it's colder and the nature is quite different from my country.

Remove duplicate 'the the'. Use 'views here' rather than repeating 'the views'. 'The Japan' is wrong; country names usually have no article: 'Japan'. Use comparative 'colder' instead of 'more cold'. 'The nature' should be 'the nature' or better 'the natural environment' — here 'the nature' changed to 'the nature is quite different' is acceptable but 'the nature' kept minimal; corrected to 'the nature is quite different' for clarity.

× My country is in the tropical area.

✓ My country is in the tropics.

'In the tropical area' is awkward; common phrasing is 'in the tropics' or 'in a tropical region'. 'The tropics' is the standard term.