视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: The answer is unclear and contains a wrong word (“Excretion”). Give a direct response to the question with a brief opinion and a reason. Keep it natural, 1–2 sentences, and avoid unrelated vocabulary. Use linking words if adding a reason.

示例: Not really. Taking pictures of views is difficult for me because I don’t have much experience with photography and I find composing landscapes challenging.

建议: The answer gives a clear preference for rural views but is disorganized and contains many errors (wrong words, repetition, grammar). Improve by producing a concise topic sentence, then one or two coherent supporting points using linking words. Use correct vocabulary (landscapes, fresh air, relax, crowded city, traffic). Limit to up to 5 sentences.

示例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because open landscapes and fresh air help me relax. For example, walking among fields and hills at the weekend lets me unwind, while city scenes often feel noisy and crowded due to traffic.

建议: The answer communicates the idea but uses many incorrect words (babies, work, skins, expended) and is repetitive. Make a clear topic sentence stating preference, then briefly contrast with other countries using linking words (however, although). Be specific with examples and correct vocabulary (familiar, memories, architecture, landscapes). Keep sentences concise.

示例: I usually prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and remind me of family trips to nearby mountains. However, I also enjoy scenery abroad because it offers new architecture and landscapes that reflect different cultures.

× Excretion is difficult for me.

✓ Taking photos is difficult for me.

The student used 'Excretion' which is incorrect and unrelated to the question. This is a sentence structure/word-choice error; replace with 'Taking photos' to accurately respond to 'Do you like taking pictures...'. Also keep simple present tense to match the question context.

× Uh-huh I prefer viewers in rural areas because the open landscapes generally and fresh air for more relaxing and restore restorates and crowded city scanners for example, seeing fields and hills on a weekend walk helps me unwind weather or Palm view of fun involve traffic and.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the open landscapes and fresh air are generally more relaxing and restorative than crowded city scenes. For example, seeing fields and hills on a weekend walk helps me unwind, whereas city views often involve traffic and noise.

Multiple issues: 'viewers' should be 'views' (incorrect noun), 'for more relaxing and restore restorates' is incorrect adjective/adverb and word form — use 'more relaxing and restorative' (adjective). 'crowded city scanners' should be 'crowded city scenes' (word choice). Sentence structure is disorganized; split into two sentences and use comparison 'than' to contrast rural and city views. Use 'are' to agree with plural subject 'landscapes and fresh air.' Use present simple to match preference.

× Uh-huh. I prefer babies in my own country because they are familiar and a work personal memories such as family trips to nearby mountains or like like us.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because they are familiar and evoke personal memories, such as family trips to nearby mountains.

'babies' is incorrect—should be 'views' (wrong noun). 'a work personal memories' is ungrammatical; use 'evoke personal memories' or 'bring back personal memories.' Remove redundant 'like like us.' Keep present simple and a clear noun phrase.

× However, I also enjoy landscapes abroad for their novelty and diff different cultures.

✓ However, I also enjoy landscapes abroad for their novelty and different cultures.

Typo/repetition: 'diff different' should be 'different.' Preposition use 'landscapes abroad for' is fine. Keep concise phrasing.

× For example seeing architecture or natural skins I have never expended before.

✓ For example, seeing architectural styles or natural scenery I have never experienced before.

Multiple word-choice errors: 'architecture or natural skins' is incorrect; use 'architectural styles or natural scenery.' 'expended' is wrong verb; the correct verb is 'experienced' (past participle form) to indicate prior experience. Include commas and keep present perfect 'have never experienced' to show lack of past experience.