视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating words (e.g., “taking pictures” twice) and aim for varied vocabulary (e.g., “landscapes,” “scenes,” “street life”).

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I often capture close-ups of flowers for their colours and textures, landscape shots of trees in parks, and candid photos of cars in busy streets to show urban life.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and then two specific reasons with coherent linking words. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g., “flow of divine”) and grammatical errors. Use vocabulary like “peaceful,” “open space,” and “privacy.”

示例: I prefer rural views because they are more peaceful and offer open space. For instance, I enjoy walking among fields where I can breathe fresh air and photograph wide landscapes without crowds, which makes me feel relaxed and free.

建议: Begin with a concise answer and then give specific reasons linked logically. Fix grammar and word order issues, and avoid redundancy (e.g., “my sense of my sense”). Use words like “familiar,” “accessible,” and “nostalgic.”

示例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and easy to visit. For example, I like returning to coastal towns and forests I knew as a child, which allows me to discover new places while feeling nostalgic about my past.

× I like taking pictures of different views, such as taking the picture of the flowers, the trees and the cars.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views, such as pictures of flowers, trees and cars.

The phrase 'the picture of the flowers, the trees and the cars' uses definite articles unnecessarily. When speaking generally about kinds of objects (flowers, trees, cars), articles are not required. Also repeating 'taking the picture' is redundant; 'pictures of' is clearer. Suggestion: use plural nouns without 'the' for general statements and avoid repetition (e.g., 'pictures of flowers, trees and cars').

× I prefer views in the rural areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas.

Using 'the' before 'rural areas' is unnecessary when referring to rural areas in general. Also the present simple 'prefer' is correct for habits, so only the article removal is needed. Suggestion: drop 'the' for general references to places (e.g., 'in rural areas').

× There is much more than I can see the nature and feel the flow of divine and feel more freedom, feel more free because there is no one to look at me.

✓ There is so much more to see: nature, the feeling of the divine, and a greater sense of freedom because no one is watching me.

The original sentence has multiple structure problems: incorrect phrase 'much more than I can see the nature', awkward 'feel the flow of divine', repeated 'feel', and tense/subject issues. Rewriting with clear noun phrases and parallel structure fixes meaning and grammar. Suggestions: break complex ideas into parallel list items, use correct collocations ('so much more to see', 'the feeling of the divine', 'no one is watching me').

× I prefer views in my country there is a much familiar places I can visit and see and explore the nature that I didn't explore when I was a child and I this give me a more sense of my sense of nostalgia.

✓ I prefer views in my country because there are many familiar places I can visit and explore, places of nature I did not explore when I was a child, and this gives me a greater sense of nostalgia.

Multiple issues: run-on sentence, incorrect article and quantifier ('a much familiar places' should be 'many familiar places' and no 'a'), tense consistency ('didn't explore' is past tense and fine), subject-verb agreement ('this give' should be 'this gives'). Rewriting into a compound sentence with conjunction 'because' and correcting quantifier and agreement clarifies meaning. Suggestion: use 'many' for plural countable nouns, ensure subject and verb agree, and avoid unnecessary words ('my sense of').