视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is relevant and natural, but check grammar (plural/singular), avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words such as “because” or “so” correctly and avoid repeating the same idea.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photos help me remember the moments I share with family and friends when we travel. For example, I often photograph sunsets and street scenes to recall the atmosphere of each trip.

建议: Your main idea is clear, but there are grammatical errors and one incorrect image (“cars grazing”). Avoid sentence fragments and use precise vocabulary. Use a linking word to contrast (e.g., “because” or “whereas”) and give a concrete specific detail or example.

示例: I prefer rural views because the countryside is cleaner and quieter than crowded cities. For instance, I enjoy photographing wide fields, farmhouses and quiet country roads where people walk or cycle.

建议: Good idea to mention both options, but there are errors and unclear phrases (“best sports to visit”). Be specific: explain what makes each place appealing and correct verb forms. Use linking words like “however” to contrast and keep each sentence focused.

示例: I enjoy photographing views both at home and abroad. At home I feel comfortable and know the best spots to capture familiar landscapes, whereas when I travel I like exploring new places and photographing different cultures and architecture.

× photos helps me to memorise the moments I spent with my family and friends while I travel to different places.

✓ photos help me to memorise the moments I spent with my family and friends while I travel to different places.

The subject 'photos' is plural, so the verb should be 'help' (base form) not 'helps' (singular). Use plural verb agreement: 'photos help'. Suggestion: Match noun number with verb: plural nouns take plural verbs (no -s in present simple).

× I love capturing the different views because photos helps me to memorise the moments I spent with my family and friends while I travel to different places.

✓ I love capturing the different views because photos help me to memorise the moments I spend with my family and friends while I travel to different places.

The clause 'while I travel to different places' describes habitual or repeated actions, so present simple 'spend' is preferred rather than past 'spent'. Use consistent present tense for habitual activities: 'I spend'. Suggestion: Use present simple for routines: 'I spend time' instead of 'I spent'. Only use past when referring to a specific past trip.

× I prefer views in rural areas as in countryside the environment is cleaner as compared to cities which are crowded and noisy.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because in the countryside the environment is cleaner compared to cities, which are crowded and noisy.

Missing article 'the' before 'countryside' is incorrect; use 'in the countryside'. 'As compared to' is wordy and awkward; 'compared to' or 'because' is better. Also add comma before nonrestrictive clause and make 'cities' match plural verb 'are'. Suggestion: Use 'in the countryside' and simplify comparisons: 'cleaner than' or 'cleaner compared to cities'. Add commas for clarity.

× In the countryside area. I love watching the cars grazing in the field and the calm environment.

✓ In the countryside, I love watching the cars grazing in the fields and enjoying the calm environment.

The original has a sentence fragment 'In the countryside area.' and awkward collocation 'cars grazing in the field' (grazing suits animals). Combine into one sentence, pluralize 'field' to 'fields' and replace 'grazing' with a verb appropriate for cars (e.g., 'driving' or 'moving') or restructure to 'watching the calm environment'. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; join clauses and use correct verbs for subjects: 'cars driving' or simply 'watching the calm environment'.

× I love watching the cars grazing in the field and the calm environment.

✓ I love watching the cars driving in the fields and the calm environment.

The verb 'grazing' is inappropriate for cars; it's for animals. Use 'driving' or 'moving' to describe cars. Also plural 'fields' fits better for rural scenery. Suggestion: Use verbs that match the subject's nature: 'cars driving' or 'cars passing by'.

× I prefer views in rural areas as in countryside the environment is cleaner as compared to cities which are crowded and noisy.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because in the countryside the environment is cleaner compared to cities, which are crowded and noisy.

Use of 'which' refers to 'cities' correctly but needs a comma. Also 'in countryside' lacks the definite article 'the'. Suggestion: Add 'the' before 'countryside' and include a comma before 'which'. Use 'because' or 'compared to' for clearer comparison.

× I love catching views in both my own country and abroad because in my home country I feel comfortable and I know the best sports to visit.

✓ I love capturing views in both my own country and abroad because in my home country I feel comfortable and I know the best spots to visit.

The word 'catching' is not the usual collocation with 'views'; 'capturing' fits photography. 'Sports' is the wrong noun here; context requires 'spots' (places to visit). Suggestion: Use collocations: 'capturing views' and 'spots to visit' for places.

× But when I travel I love to explore new places and capturing different cultures.

✓ But when I travel, I love to explore new places and capture different cultures.

After 'love to explore', the parallel verb should be base form 'capture' (or both gerunds: 'loving exploring... and capturing'). Mixing 'to explore' with 'capturing' breaks parallel structure. Also add comma after introductory clause. Suggestion: Keep verbs parallel: 'love to explore... and capture' or 'love exploring... and capturing'.