视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (what kinds of views you like, what equipment or style you use). Use linking words (for example, because, so) appropriately and vary vocabulary to sound natural.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy photographing different views. I especially like natural landscapes such as coastlines and forests because the light and colors change throughout the day, giving me interesting compositions. For example, I often go out at sunrise to capture mist over a river with my phone or camera.

建议: Answer directly (choose a preference or say you like both) and avoid unclear phrases. Use a clear topic sentence, then provide specific contrasting details with linking words (however, while, because). Correct repetitions and irrelevant comments (e.g., 'fan of the boats' is unclear).

示例: I like both urban and rural views, but for different reasons. Urban scenes interest me because of striking architecture and lively streets, while rural landscapes appeal to me due to peaceful fields and traditional scenes that reflect culture. For instance, I enjoy photographing city skylines at sunset, whereas in the countryside I focus on small fishing boats and farmland.

建议: Begin with a direct response (e.g., I prefer views in my country because... or I can't compare because...). Avoid repetition and improve coherence by using linking words (however, although). Provide one specific example of a view at home to support your opinion.

示例: I can't compare directly because I haven't traveled abroad, but I really value the views in my country, Nigeria. For example, the coastal beaches and rolling hills around my hometown offer dramatic sunsets and vibrant local life that I enjoy photographing. Although online photos of other countries look attractive, I prefer the familiar beauty at home.

× I'm a big advocate for nature and for environment, so I love taking pictures and just to have it aesthetic because they are very aesthetically pleasing.

✓ I'm a big advocate for nature and the environment, so I love taking pictures to make them look aesthetic because they are very pleasing to the eye.

Use 'the environment' (definite article) not 'for environment' and remove redundant 'for' after advocate. 'Taking pictures to make them look aesthetic' is correct structure instead of 'and just to have it aesthetic.' 'Pleasing to the eye' is the idiomatic expression. Also removed repetitive 'aesthetically.' Grammar problem types: 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions) and 22 (Article errors).

× So I actually love taking pictures of views.

✓ So I actually love taking pictures of views.

This sentence is grammatically correct; present simple expresses a general liking. No change required.

× I would say I'm more on both because there are some views on urban areas that look very nice and very pleasing to the human eyes.

✓ I would say I like both, because some views in urban areas look very nice and pleasing to the eye.

Use 'in urban areas' not 'on urban areas' (preposition error). 'I'm more on both' is unnatural; 'I like both' fits. Use singular idiom 'pleasing to the eye' instead of 'to the human eyes.' Grammar problem types: 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions) and 22 (Article errors).

× And while some views in rural areas are so deep to nature and they just take you back to your cultural background.

✓ Some views in rural areas are very close to nature and can take you back to your cultural roots.

'Deep to nature' is incorrect; use 'close to nature' or 'deep in nature.' 'Take you back to your cultural background' is awkward; 'take you back to your cultural roots' is idiomatic. Also adjust modal 'can' for possibility. Grammar problem type: 26 (Sentence structure errors).

× So I'll say I'm I'm a big fan of the boats.

✓ So I'd say I'm a big fan of boats.

Duplicate 'I'm I'm' is an error. 'The boats' implies specific boats; general preference uses 'boats' without article. Contraction 'I'd say' is more natural here. Grammar problem types: 26 (Sentence structure errors) and 22 (Article errors).

× I've never been abroad, I've never been outside the country, so I really don't know about the views outside there.

✓ I've never been abroad or outside the country, so I really don't know about the views elsewhere.

Combine similar clauses with 'or' for conciseness. 'Outside there' is awkward; use 'elsewhere.' Present perfect 'I've never been' correctly expresses experience. Also removing redundancy improves clarity. Grammar problem types: 6 (Present tense issue) and 22 (Article errors).

× But what I see virtually on the Internet, I think the views are very are pleasing to the eyes.

✓ But from what I see online, I think the views are very pleasing to the eye.

'Virtually on the Internet' is wordy; 'from what I see online' is natural. Remove duplicate 'are' and use idiom 'pleasing to the eye.' Grammar problem types: 26 (Sentence structure errors) and 22 (Article errors).

× But views in my country Nigeria are so beautiful to to see.

✓ But views in my country, Nigeria, are beautiful to see.

Remove duplicated 'to' and add commas around 'Nigeria' as an appositive. 'So beautiful to see' is acceptable but 'beautiful to see' is cleaner. Also ensure spacing and punctuation are correct. Grammar problem types: 26 (Sentence structure errors) and 22 (Article errors).