视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and avoid filler words (e.g., "uh"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences and use a wider range of vocabulary (e.g., "architectural scenes", "landscapes").

示例: Yes — I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I lived in Houston I often photographed downtown’s modern architecture, and now in Spain I capture coastal landscapes to send to my family.

建议: Give a direct answer first, then explain with one clear reason and a specific example. Avoid repetitive phrasing like "used to" and unclear comparisons. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "however") to structure your reply.

示例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy city architecture and vibrant street scenes. For example, in San Francisco I photographed iconic buildings and lively neighborhoods, so I tend to take more pictures in cities than in rural areas.

建议: Answer directly whether you prefer local or foreign views, then give one specific comparison with clear language. Avoid vague phrases like "that cave of areas" and grammatical errors such as "I was being in love". Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "caves", "coastlines").

示例: I enjoy views in both places, but my country’s beaches and mountains are special to me. However, I also loved San Francisco’s bay views and Victorian houses when I lived in the US, so I appreciate scenic spots both at home and abroad.

× Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views.

No change needed; sentence correctly uses present simple to express a general preference.

× For example, when I was living in Houston in the US, I used to take some pictures of the buildings uh in downtown as well.

✓ For example, when I was living in Houston in the US, I used to take pictures of the buildings downtown as well.

Remove filler 'uh' and the unnecessary 'some' for natural speech. 'Used to take' correctly indicates a past habitual action; 'downtown' does not need the preposition 'in' after 'buildings'. Suggestion: avoid fillers and redundant words.

× Additionally, here in Spain, as this is a new country for me, I like to take pictures as well and send it to my family.

✓ Additionally, here in Spain, as this is a new country for me, I like to take pictures as well and send them to my family.

Pronoun agreement error: 'pictures' is plural so use the plural pronoun 'them' instead of 'it'. This falls under incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) but also present-tense preference; correction uses present simple 'like' and plural pronoun.

× I prefer both, but for instance, when I went to San Francisco, I took many pictures there, so I used to go to cities or urban areas than more than two rural areas, so I used to take more pictures in urban areas.

✓ I prefer both, but for instance, when I went to San Francisco I took many pictures there, so I tended to go to cities or urban areas rather than rural areas, and I used to take more pictures in urban areas.

Original sentence has incorrect comparative phrasing 'than more than two rural areas' and awkward repetition. Use 'rather than' to contrast choices and 'tended to' or 'used to' for habitual past actions. Remove unclear numeric phrase. Suggestion: simplify contrast and avoid redundant clauses.

× In my country, we have beautiful views of the beaches and of many mountains and that cave of areas.

✓ In my country, we have beautiful beaches, many mountains, and some interesting caves.

Original phrase 'that cave of areas' is ungrammatical and unclear. Reorder nouns for natural listing and use appropriate quantifiers ('some interesting caves'). This fixes sentence structure and adjective/noun use.

× But I was living in the US as well, and for example, I was being in love with San Francisco because it's a beautiful city and I love the views there.

✓ But I also lived in the US, and for example, I fell in love with San Francisco because it's a beautiful city and I love the views there.

'Was living' is acceptable but 'I was being in love' is incorrect; 'be in love' is a stative verb not used in continuous past progressive in that form. Use 'I fell in love with' to describe becoming fond of the city. Also simplify 'was living' to 'lived' for clarity. Keep present 'it's' and 'I love' to express current feelings.