视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer, concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct unclear phrasing (e.g. ‘no people on it but my face’).

示例: I enjoy taking landscape photos of different views. For example, I prefer horizontal shots of empty scenes where I can include my silhouette to show scale, because this creates a peaceful, minimalist look.

建议: Give a direct answer and make supporting details relevant and coherent. Avoid contradictory words (you said urban but described rural features). Use linking words and specific examples, and correct grammar (e.g. ‘greener’, ‘walking in fields helps me relax’).

示例: I prefer rural views because the greener open spaces help me relax after a busy week. For example, walking through fields and looking at distant hills clears my mind and lowers my stress level.

建议: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Provide one clear reason with a specific example. Use correct singular/plural (’my country’) and concise supporting detail instead of repeating phrases. Mention what ‘developing’ means for safety or convenience.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel safer and more familiar there. For example, recent infrastructure improvements like better roads and signage make traveling to scenic spots more comfortable and secure.

× Yes, I like to take pictures of different views with different landscapes, like like landscape horizontal and like, you know, with no people on it but my face and my **** my body structure is in it.

✓ Yes, I like to take pictures of different views and landscapes, such as horizontal landscapes, usually without people in them; sometimes my face or body appears in the photo.

The original sentence has awkward and incorrect adjective/adverb usage and repetition ('like like'), unclear noun phrases ('landscape horizontal'), and wordiness. Revise to use correct adjective order ('horizontal landscapes'), remove repetitions, and restructure the sentence for clarity. Suggest practicing concise noun phrases and placing adjectives before nouns. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× Yes, I prefer uh urban areas because, uh, because the open landscapes and the greenier help me to relax after a busy week.

✓ Yes, I prefer urban areas because the open landscapes and the greenery help me relax after a busy week.

'The greenier' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'the greenery'. Also drop filler words ('uh, because') and unnecessary 'to' after 'help' when followed by a verb without 'to'. Use 'help me relax' or 'help relax me' (better: 'help me relax'). Practice using correct noun forms and removing filler words. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× For example, walking by fields or relax clears my mind and reduces stress.

✓ For example, walking by fields or relaxing clears my mind and reduces stress.

Mixing 'walking' (gerund) with bare verb 'relax' is inconsistent. Use parallel gerunds: 'walking' and 'relaxing'. This is a present tense habitual action, so gerunds are appropriate. Ensure parallel structure when listing activities. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× I prefer my own countries because it is safe in in our country nowadays because because the government is now developing and now rise up to the point of the to the point of the to the point of the.

✓ I prefer my own country because it is safe nowadays; the government is developing and the country is improving.

The original uses plural 'countries' while referring to 'our country' (singular), causing inconsistency. It also repeats phrases and uses incorrect verb 'rise up to' for improvement. Correct to singular 'country' and use appropriate verbs 'is developing' and 'is improving'. Remove repetition and redundant words. Practice subject consistency (singular vs plural) and clear sentence endings. Grammar problem type ID: 1