视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unnecessary words (e.g. "of course", "the") and use correct collocations ("social media" not "social medias").

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph city skylines and seaside sunsets to post on social media because those scenes attract more likes and memories for me.

建议: Answer directly then give clear reasons with specific examples and correct vocabulary. Use linking words such as "because" or "for example". Avoid informal contractions in the test (use "because" rather than "'cause"), and correct noun choices ("site" -> "sites" or specific names like "Disneyland").

示例: I prefer views in urban areas because cities offer a variety of modern architecture and attractions. For example, I enjoy photographing places like Disneyland and contemporary city squares where there are interesting buildings and lively streets.

建议: Clarify and correct vocabulary and grammar first ("views" not "veils", "abroad" not "aboard"). Give a clear topic sentence and one specific reason with an example. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "because" or "since."

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I like discovering different cultures and scenery. For instance, when I was young I used to browse travel photos online, which made me curious to visit places abroad and take my own pictures.

× Yes, of course I like taking pictures of different views because I want to post many pictures on the social medias in different places.

✓ Yes, of course I like taking pictures of different views because I want to post many pictures on social media in different places.

Use of the quantifier phrase 'many pictures' is acceptable, but 'social medias' is incorrect: 'social media' is an uncountable noun that does not take a plural form. Remove the article 'the' because 'social media' is used generally. Suggestion: say 'post many pictures on social media.'

× It's a great questions. I prefer urban areas 'cause I want to look around in many new places like Disney site or the modern site.

✓ It's a great question. I prefer urban areas because I want to look around many new places like Disneyland or modern city areas.

'Questions' should be singular to agree with the singular predicative 'It's a great...' so change to 'question'. The contraction ' 'cause' is informal; use 'because' in a test. 'Look around in many new places' has unnecessary preposition 'in' after 'around'; use 'look around many new places' or 'look around in many new places'. 'Disney site' and 'the modern site' are incorrect collocations: use 'Disneyland' or 'Disney sites' and 'modern city areas' or 'modern sites.' Also removed the informal apostrophe contraction for clarity.

× I prefer veils in other countries because I want to go aboard and take more pictures when I go there.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I want to go abroad and take more pictures when I go there.

The student wrote 'veils' instead of 'views' (wrong word choice) and 'aboard' instead of 'abroad' (preposition confusion). 'Abroad' means overseas; 'aboard' means on board. Correcting to 'views' and 'abroad' fixes the meaning. Also the rest of the sentence is grammatically acceptable.

× When I was young I searched many pictures and I felt interest.

✓ When I was young I searched for many pictures and I felt interested.

'Searched many pictures' is ungrammatical: the verb 'search' usually takes 'for' when followed by an object being sought, so use 'searched for many pictures.' 'I felt interest' is a noun phrase; to express an emotion use the adjective 'interested' (I felt interested) or the noun with 'had' (I had an interest). Therefore change to 'I felt interested.'