视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it has some issues with grammar, word choice and slight redundancy. Make your main point in one concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct phrases such as “give off a classic vibe” (acceptable but informal) and “give much more expression and dynamic” (awkward — use “expressiveness and dynamism” or “more expression and movement”). Avoid repeating similar ideas.

示例: Yes — I enjoy photographing different views, especially historic buildings and scenic landscapes because they have a timeless quality. However, I prefer photographing people and animals since they show more expression and movement; for example, I like capturing a child laughing or a bird in flight because those moments feel lively and unique.

建议: The answer conveys a preference but contains unclear or irrelevant phrasing (“I will see 2 girls” is confusing) and some grammatical issues. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because” and “also”). Avoid awkward comparative phrases like “as compared to the rural area” — use “than rural areas.”

示例: I prefer urban photography because city environments are more controllable and familiar. For instance, I can choose streets with good natural or artificial lighting, and I know the best spots from previous visits, so I feel more confident shooting there than in rural areas.

建议: Your meaning is understandable but the response has pronoun errors and confusing sentence structure (e.g., “There are views that they prefer” and “in other countries in the Philippines”). Make a clear comparison with one topic sentence and then specific examples. Use linking words like “for” and “however” and correct pronouns.

示例: I like photographing certain views in my own country and others abroad. For example, I prefer taking beach photos in the Philippines because of its white sand and clear water; however, for mountain landscapes and historic architecture, I prefer photographing scenes in other countries because they offer different styles and preserved landmarks.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially when they involve historic or scenic sites as they give off a classic vibe. But I prefer taking pictures of animals and people because to me they give much more expression and dynamic.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially when they involve historic or scenic sites, as they give off a classic vibe. But I prefer taking pictures of animals and people because, to me, they give much more expression and dynamism.

The sentence had minor punctuation and word choice issues. 'because to me' needs commas to set off the phrase 'to me' as a parenthetical expression. 'dynamic' is an adjective; the correct noun here is 'dynamism' to match 'expression'. Also a comma before 'as' improves clarity when it introduces a reason clause. Suggestion: Add commas around 'to me' and use the noun 'dynamism' instead of the adjective 'dynamic'.

× I will see 2 girls so my heart is for urban photography.

✓ I will see two girls, so my heart is with urban photography.

The phrase 'my heart is for' is unnatural; native speakers say 'my heart is with' or 'I prefer'. Also numerals should be written in words in formal writing: 'two' not '2'. No third-person singular verb error here but the original wording is awkward; changing preposition corrects meaning. Suggestion: Use 'with' after 'my heart is' and write numbers in words in formal responses.

× I feel that taking pictures in an urban setting is much more manageable since you have control over circumstances such as the lighting and also since you're already familiar with the place, it's much more comfortable as compared to the rural area.

✓ I feel that taking pictures in an urban setting is much more manageable since you have control over things such as the lighting, and because you're already familiar with the place, it's much more comfortable compared to rural areas.

Problems: 'circumstances such as the lighting' is better as 'things such as the lighting' or 'aspects such as lighting'. 'as compared to the rural area' is wordy and mismatched in number; use 'compared to rural areas'. Also use 'and because' to link reasons more naturally. Suggestion: Replace 'circumstances' with 'things' or 'aspects', change 'the rural area' to 'rural areas', and use 'compared to'.

× There are views that they prefer in the Philippines and there are those that I prefer in other countries in the Philippines, since it's known for its white sand and scenic beaches.

✓ There are views that I prefer in the Philippines, and there are those I prefer in other countries. The Philippines is known for its white sand and scenic beaches, so I prefer taking photos there for that reason.

Errors: 'There are views that they prefer' incorrectly uses 'they' instead of 'I', causing a pronoun reference error. The phrase 'in other countries in the Philippines' is nonsensical and likely a word-order mistake. Also splitting into two sentences improves clarity and correctly attributes the reason to the Philippines. Suggestion: Use consistent first-person pronouns ('I') and avoid placing 'in the Philippines' after 'other countries'.

× But it comes to mountain sceneries and historic places, I prefer other countries.

✓ But when it comes to mountain scenery and historic places, I prefer other countries.

Original has incorrect word order and pluralization: 'But it comes to' should be 'But when it comes to'. 'Mountain sceneries' is awkward; 'mountain scenery' (uncountable) is more natural. Suggestion: Use the fixed phrase 'when it comes to' and treat 'scenery' as an uncountable noun.