视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Speak more directly and clearly. Begin with a concise topic sentence that answers the question, avoid filler words (uh, umm), correct grammar (plural/singular and verbs), and give one brief reason or example. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use a linking word if you add detail.

示例: Not really. I prefer to enjoy scenes with my own eyes rather than taking photos because I find it more relaxing and immediate. For example, when I visit a park I focus on the atmosphere instead of photographing everything.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give a specific reason and one short supporting detail. Remove repetition and fillers, and use a linking word (e.g., because, so) to connect reason and example. Keep sentences grammatically correct and concise.

示例: I prefer rural areas because I work in a busy city and see urban scenery every day. For instance, during my daily commute in Beijing I already get plenty of city views, so I like to go to the countryside to relax.

建议: Give a direct answer and a clear reason. Avoid contradictory wording (saying both you prefer and didn’t prefer) and remove fillers. Use precise vocabulary (coastline, hills, scenery) and one linking word to explain your opinion. Provide a concise example if useful.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because we have varied scenery such as coastlines and hills. Therefore, I feel I can find enough different views at home without needing to travel abroad.

× No, I don't really enjoy taking picture, uh, by cameras or my phones because I uh, because I like uh, take photos by my own eyes because I think, umm, I uh.

✓ No, I don't really enjoy taking pictures with cameras or my phone because I like to take photos with my own eyes.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' when referring to the general activity of taking multiple photos (singular and plural issue). 'By cameras or my phones' is incorrect preposition and plural; use 'with cameras or my phone' (preposition and singular/plural consistency). 'Take photos by my own eyes' is unnatural; use the infinitive 'to take' and 'with my own eyes'. Suggestion: use plural for general activities, prefer 'with' for instruments, and use 'to' before verbs showing preference.

× I prefer rural areas because I work in a big city, Beijing, and in my commute, uh, in my commute Rd. I always could uh, enjoy or surrounded by, uh, city views and uh, in every day.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I work in a big city, Beijing, and during my commute I am always surrounded by city views every day.

Use 'during' rather than 'in' for 'during my commute' (incorrect use of prepositions). 'Surrounded by' requires the verb 'am' for present continuous/static state: 'I am always surrounded by' (subject-verb agreement/verb missing). 'Enjoy or surrounded by' is incorrect combination; choose one verb. Also 'in every day' should be 'every day'. Suggestion: use 'during my commute' and 'surrounded by' with a correct verb form, and use 'every day' for daily frequency.

× In my country, uh, we have ocean and we have hills. So, umm, for me, this is a enough variety of views. I didn't prefer, uh, foreign country or, uh, my own country. I just, uh, think if there are enough.

✓ In my country we have an ocean and hills. For me, this is a sufficient variety of views. I don't prefer foreign countries over my own country; I just think it depends on whether there are enough views.

Use articles correctly: 'an ocean' (article error) and pluralize 'foreign country' to 'foreign countries' if speaking generally (singular/plural). 'A enough' is incorrect; use 'a sufficient' or 'enough' without 'a' (incorrect use of quantifiers/articles). 'I didn't prefer' is wrong tense; use 'I don't prefer' (present tense for general preference). The final clause was unclear; 'I just think if there are enough' should be 'I just think it depends on whether there are enough views' to complete the thought (sentence structure and clarity). Suggestion: use correct articles with singular nouns, pluralize when generalizing, and choose correct quantifier 'sufficient' or 'enough'.