视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, avoid fillers and repetitions, and give one or two specific reasons or an example. Use linking words (for example, however) to make your answer coherent and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: I don’t usually like taking pictures of every view because I prefer to enjoy scenes with my eyes. However, if I encounter a unique or special scene, I will take a photo to remember it. For example, I photographed a sunrise at the beach last month because the colors were unforgettable.

建议: Give a direct answer (urban or rural or both) and support it with clear reasons and one example. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Use linking words like "because" or "while" to connect ideas, and keep sentences short and specific.

示例: I prefer rural views because they are calmer and more natural. For example, I enjoy wide fields and mountain landscapes where there is less noise and more fresh air. In contrast, urban views are interesting for architecture, but they feel busier.

建议: Answer directly and give specific reasons. Avoid vague or repetitive phrasing. Use linking words (for example, because, so, for instance) and provide a concrete example of a view abroad that relaxed you. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new landscapes and cultural scenery that I don’t see at home. For instance, I felt very relaxed when I visited a coastal village abroad with colorful boats and quiet beaches, which was very different from the places near my hometown.

× I'm not sure about that because I, I prefer to use my eyes to feel the different views.

✓ I'm not sure about that because I prefer to use my eyes to take in the different views.

The original repeats 'I' and uses 'feel' awkwardly with 'views'. This is a pronoun repetition/usage and word choice issue. Remove duplicate 'I' and use 'take in' instead of 'feel' for natural English when describing observing scenery. Also keep present simple to match the question context.

× Uh, in addition, if I miss, uh, special views, I take photos for the Sometimes I, uh, take open my pictures.

✓ In addition, if I miss special views, I sometimes take photos to capture them.

The original has fragmented structure and misplaced words ('for the', 'open my pictures') causing unclear meaning. Reorganize into a clear conditional and main clause. Use 'sometimes' in correct position and 'take photos to capture them' for clarity.

× I think open the error or real error them all have different special points.

✓ I think both urban and rural areas each have different special features.

The sentence contains unclear and incorrect words ('open the error or real error') and awkward noun choice 'points'. Replace with 'both urban and rural areas' and 'special features'. This fixes incorrect adjective/noun usage and makes the idea clear.

× For example Urban has a necessity conditional conditional but.

✓ For example, urban areas have different advantages and characteristics.

The original is ungrammatical and has repeated nonsense words ('necessity conditional conditional'). Rewrite to convey a plausible contrast: 'urban areas have different advantages and characteristics.' Maintain present simple tense to describe general facts.

× I prefer using other countries because in my own countries, uh, I have a similar feeling my countries, so I prefer other countries.

✓ I prefer visiting other countries because in my own country I have similar experiences, so I like to go elsewhere.

Problems include incorrect pluralization of 'country' and awkward pronoun/reference ('my countries', 'similar feeling my countries'). Use singular 'country' when referring to one's own nation and clarify 'similar experiences'. Keep present simple preference.

× I want to know other countries, uh, control or their special views.

✓ I want to learn about other countries' cultures and their unique sights.

The phrase 'control or their special views' is incorrect. Likely intended 'culture' and 'views' meaning 'sights'. Use possessive 'countries'' and correct nouns 'cultures' and 'unique sights' to express the idea clearly.

× It can makes me feel relaxed.

✓ It can make me feel relaxed.

Modal verb 'can' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not a third-person singular form. Change 'makes' to 'make' to match the modal construction.