视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Also correct tense and article errors (e.g., “I want to be a photographer one day”). Keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography is my favorite hobby and I hope to become a photographer one day. For example, I love capturing small details like the light on leaves, which can change the mood of a scene. This attention to detail is what keeps me interested.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence and avoid filler words. Use linking words to explain the mood-based preference and provide one clear example for each option. Correct vocabulary (use 'countryside' not 'counter') and remove repeated phrases.

示例: I like both urban and rural views, but it depends on my mood. For instance, when I feel energetic I enjoy busy city streets with vibrant lights; however, when I want to relax I prefer the calm countryside with open fields.

建议: Start with a clear answer and then give a specific reason using linking words. Reduce hesitation and correct grammar (e.g., 'make us different' not 'makes us different'). Mention one concrete example of a unique landmark or landscape to be more convincing.

示例: I prefer views in both my country and abroad because each offers something different. For example, my country has unique historical landmarks and dramatic landscapes that you rarely see elsewhere, whereas other countries offer different architectural styles and cultural scenery that I also enjoy.

× I like taking pictures of different views because I really love photography and I wanted to be one day a photographer in future because it's really my favorite hobby.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because I really love photography and I want to be a photographer one day in the future because it is my favorite hobby.

Errors: 'wanted' is past tense but speaker means a present desire, so use 'want' (Present tense issue, ID 6). 'be one day a photographer in future' has incorrect word order and missing articles; corrected to 'be a photographer one day in the future' (Article/order issues, IDs 22 and 26). Suggestion: use present tense for current wishes, include the indefinite article 'a' before professions, and place time expressions ('one day', 'in the future') after the noun phrase.

× How the feeling of the the view, the small details of the view, that makes me really like photography.

✓ The feeling of the view and the small details of it are what make me really like photography.

Errors: sentence is ungrammatical and has redundancy ('the the', repeated 'of the view'). Also subject-verb agreement: plural subject 'the feeling and the small details' requires plural verb 'make' (Subject-verb agreement, ID 27). Suggestion: combine ideas into a clear subject, remove duplicates, and ensure verb agrees with the subject.

× I really like both and I prefer both, but it is it depends on my mood.

✓ I really like both, but it depends on my mood.

Errors: unnecessary repetition 'I prefer both' is redundant; 'it is it depends' is ungrammatical — use 'it depends' (Sentence structure error, ID 26). Suggestion: remove redundant phrase and use the correct clause 'it depends on my mood.'

× Sometimes I want to see uh, cities, uh, busy streets and sometimes I want to the counter.

✓ Sometimes I want to see cities and busy streets, and sometimes I want to go to the countryside.

Errors: missing verb 'go' after 'want to' (Sentence without a verb / verb omission, ID 23) and incorrect noun 'the counter' likely intended 'the countryside' (word choice/preposition, ID 11). Suggestion: use complete verb phrase 'want to go to' and correct noun 'countryside.'

× So I have so both.

✓ So I have both.

Errors: extra word 'so' makes the sentence ungrammatical (Sentence structure error, ID 26). Suggestion: remove the extra 'so' to make a concise statement.

× I prefer both views because here in the way we have views that other European countries especially don't have, they have nature, they have cities, but here we have a special unique, uh, places, landmarks that really makes us different than other countries.

✓ I prefer both views because in our country we have views that other European countries, especially, do not have. They have nature and cities, but we have unique places and landmarks that really make us different from other countries.

Errors: awkward phrase 'here in the way' corrected to 'in our country' (Sentence structure, ID 26). 'especially don't have' needs repositioning; avoid split verb. 'a special unique, uh, places' mixes singular article with plural noun and word order is wrong — remove 'a' and order adjectives correctly: 'unique places' (Article errors ID 22 and order of adjectives ID 18). 'that really makes us different than other countries' has subject-verb agreement ('places... make', ID 27) and wrong preposition 'different than' should be 'different from' (Incorrect use of prepositions, ID 11). Suggestion: use correct article-noun agreement, place adjectives before nouns, ensure verb agrees with plural subject, and use 'different from.'