视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 문장 구조를 좀 더 명확히 하고 연결어와 구체적 세부사항을 추가하세요. 예를 들어 이유를 말할 때 단순 반복(예: because it helps me to remember the trip) 대신 구체적인 상황이나 감정을 덧붙이면 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한 너무 긴 문장은 2~3개의 문장으로 나누어 명확성을 높이세요.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially when I travel abroad. For example, I often photograph local architecture and street scenes because these images bring back specific memories of the place and the people I met.

建议: 말할 때 망설임(umm)과 문법 오류(people who lives)를 줄이고 주제 문장을 더 직접적으로 제시하세요. 또한 왜 도시 경관을 선호하는지 구체적인 이유와 예시를 연결어(For example, because, so)로 설명하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

示例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy watching city life and the interactions between people. For example, I like photographing busy markets and public transport because they show how locals live and create lively, memorable scenes.

建议: 답변이 불분명하고 문법·표현 오류(‘it is really difficult for my country so and and’)가 있습니다. 먼저 명확한 주제 문장으로 시작하고, 이유를 두세 개의 구체적인 근거로 제시하세요. 또한 ‘individual atmosphere’ 대신 더 자연스러운 표현(e.g., distinct atmosphere or unique character)을 사용하세요.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they often have a distinct atmosphere and different architectural styles. For instance, when I visit Europe I notice historic buildings and street layouts that are completely different from those in my country, which makes photographing them more interesting.

× I think I prefer urban views because I enjoy observing, umm, people who lives in the big city as a traveler's perspectives.

✓ I think I prefer urban views because I enjoy observing, umm, people who live in the big city from a traveler's perspective.

Subject-verb agreement: 'people' is plural so the verb should be 'live' not 'lives'. Also use singular noun phrase 'a traveler's perspective' instead of 'perspectives' to match the idea of the speaker's viewpoint. Suggestion: ensure the verb matches the subject number and use the correct noun form for the intended meaning.

× I prefer views in other countries because it is really difficult for my country so and and a lot of countries have an individual atmosphere.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because it is really difficult to travel around my country, and many other countries have a unique atmosphere.

Sentence structure and clarity: the original contains awkward phrasing and repetition ('so and and') and an unclear cause. Corrected to 'it is really difficult to travel around my country' to express a clear reason, replaced 'a lot of countries' with 'many other countries', and 'individual atmosphere' with the more natural 'unique atmosphere'. Suggestion: remove repetitions, make the cause explicit, and choose natural collocations ('travel around', 'unique atmosphere').