视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (verb tenses, countable/uncountable nouns) and avoid filler sounds. Aim for 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I do. Whenever I travel, I usually take many photos of natural scenes such as beaches and sunsets because I find their colours and shapes fascinating. For example, last summer I photographed the sunset over a cliff, and the golden light made the scene unforgettable.

建议: Give a direct answer first and explain with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words (because, for example, although) and avoid hesitation markers. Use clearer vocabulary (atmosphere, energy, architecture) and correct small grammatical mistakes.

示例: I prefer urban views because they offer interesting architecture and a lively atmosphere. For example, walking through a city centre I enjoy the contrast of old buildings and modern shops, which makes the scene feel dynamic and full of energy.

建议: Be more structured: answer directly (own country/other countries/both) and give specific reasons and examples. Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Mention concrete features you like about Italy and Brazil (historic architecture, colourful landscapes) and use correct grammar and sentence structure.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing different styles and cultures. For instance, I love Italy for its historic streets and classical architecture, and Brazil for its vibrant coastlines and colourful city life; these differences make travelling visually exciting.

× Like everywhere I go, I start to take a lot of pictures of the nature of the beach, sunset, like anything like it's very amazing for me.

✓ Like everywhere I go, I start taking a lot of pictures of the beach, sunsets, and other natural views; it's very amazing to me.

The phrase 'start to take' is acceptable but 'start taking' is more natural here (verb + -ing). 'The nature of the beach, sunset' is awkward; use 'the beach, sunsets, and other natural views' to list items. Also change 'it's very amazing for me' to 'it's very amazing to me' for idiomatic use. Use plural 'sunsets' to refer generally. Suggestion: Use continuous -ing after 'start' and list items clearly; ensure preposition 'to' with 'amazing to me'.

× I definitely took a lot of picture of it.

✓ I definitely took a lot of pictures of it.

The noun 'picture' should be plural when modified by 'a lot of'. This is a singular/plural error. Use 'pictures' after 'a lot of'. Suggestion: Match count words with plural nouns: 'a lot of pictures'.

× I guess I, I'm more into urban areas, uh, because I feel maybe something special about it and that would give me some feelings and motion to this, uh, areas, I guess.

✓ I guess I'm more into urban areas because I feel there is something special about them, and they give me certain feelings and emotions.

The original has redundant fillers and incorrect pronoun and noun agreement: 'this areas' mixes singular demonstrative with plural noun. 'Some feelings and motion' is unnatural; 'emotions' fits better. This is overall sentence structure errors and clarity. Also change 'about it' to 'about them' to match 'areas'. Suggestion: Remove filler words, ensure demonstratives and pronouns agree in number with nouns, and choose appropriate nouns like 'emotions'.

× Uh, I guess first of all, in every country there is something special about it.

✓ I guess, first of all, every country has something special about it.

Use of 'there is' is acceptable, but 'every country has something special' is clearer and more direct. This addresses the 'there be' construction preference and keeps subject-first structure. Suggestion: Prefer active constructions like 'every country has' for clarity.

× But for me, I don't know what is the people loving, uh, the view in my country.

✓ But for me, I don't know what people in my country like about the views.

'What is the people loving' is ungrammatical: wrong word order and verb form. Use 'what people ... like' to ask about preferences. Also place 'in my country' after 'people' to clarify which people are meant. This is a pronoun and word order issue. Suggestion: Use 'what people in my country like about the views' for correct word order and verb form.

× But for me, I like to the view is in Italy and in Brazil, like I feel like something so special or because maybe.

✓ For me, I like the views in Italy and Brazil because I feel they are very special.

The original has incorrect preposition 'to the view is in' and awkward phrasing 'like I feel like something so special or because maybe.' Replace with 'I like the views in Italy and Brazil because I feel they are very special.' This fixes preposition and overall clarity. Suggestion: Use 'like the views in [country]' and a clear reason clause 'because I feel they are very special.'