视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and add one specific detail using a linking word. Keep to at most 3–4 sentences. Pronunciation and grammar: correct small errors ("it makes me feel", "mountains, the sea").

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially natural scenes. For example, I often take photos of mountains and the sea because they calm me and inspire me creatively. Additionally, I sometimes capture unique light or weather conditions to make the images more interesting.

建议: Give a direct opinion then support with 1–2 clear, specific reasons using linking words. Avoid vague words and grammar mistakes (e.g. "unique and significant" not "a unique and a significance"). Keep sentences shorter and more natural.

示例: I don't have a strong preference; I like both urban and rural views. Urban scenes are interesting because of architecture and busy street life, while rural landscapes are calming because of open fields and natural light.

建议: State your preference clearly, then explain with specific reasons and examples. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g. "take something to for"). Use linking words like "because" or "however" and correct grammar ("in other countries I can see new scenery").

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new and rare scenery that I can't see at home. For instance, when I travel abroad I often photograph unusual landscapes or cityscapes that become memorable souvenirs.

× I do I like taking pictures for the, for different views.

✓ I do. I like taking pictures of different views.

Use the gerund 'taking' correctly with the preposition 'of' to indicate what is being photographed. Add a period to separate clauses. 'For different views' is incorrect preposition use; 'of different views' is natural. Suggestion: Use 'take pictures of' and separate ideas with punctuation.

× I like the natural views like mountain, sea and and other landscapes.

✓ I like natural views such as mountains, the sea, and other landscapes.

Use plural nouns for countable items (mountains). 'The' before 'natural views' is unnecessary. Use 'such as' to introduce examples and include 'the' before 'sea' when referring to a specific body of water. Remove duplicated 'and'. Suggestion: Use plural forms for general examples and correct introductory phrase 'such as'.

× Uh, it's makes me feel better when I see the, the view and also it's I, I.

✓ It makes me feel better when I see a view, and I also feel happy.

'It's makes' is ungrammatical; use 'It makes' (subject 'it' with base verb). Remove repetition and clarify the second clause. Use 'a view' or 'the view' consistently. The original had fragmented speech; produce a complete sentence. Suggestion: Use 'It makes me feel...' and avoid repeated fragments.

× It doesn't matter for me, I like both of them because in also urban areas and rural areas there is a unique and a significance and calming views.

✓ It doesn't matter to me; I like both because in both urban and rural areas there are unique, significant, and calming views.

Use 'to me' rather than 'for me' after 'doesn't matter'. 'There is' must agree with plural 'views' so use 'there are'. Remove extra articles before uncountable adjectives and ensure parallel structure. Use commas to separate adjectives. 'Also' misplaced; use 'both' for parallelism. Suggestion: Use 'doesn't matter to me', 'there are' for plural, and list adjectives in parallel.

× Actually I like a different country because in my country possibly I will see this view more and more times.

✓ Actually, I prefer a different country because in my country I would probably see this view many times.

'Like a different country' is better expressed as 'prefer a different country'. 'Possibly I will' is better as 'I would probably' to match hypothetical preference. 'More and more times' is awkward; use 'many times'. Add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'prefer' for choices and 'would probably' for hypothetical situations; use 'many times' for frequency.

× But in other country there is no opportunity to to see the the view if I didn't go and travel there.

✓ But in another country there would be no opportunity to see the view if I didn't travel there.

Use 'another country' not 'other country'. Use conditional 'would be' to match the unreal past 'didn't go' -> better 'didn't travel' or use 'didn't go' with past context; here use conditional for hypothetical situations. Remove duplicate words and extra 'the'. Suggestion: Use 'another' for a single country and match conditional verb forms.

× So I would like to take something to for.

✓ So I would like to take some photos there.

Original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Take something to for' is ungrammatical. Based on context, the intended meaning is to take photos while traveling, so 'take some photos there' is concise and grammatical. Suggestion: Express the intended action clearly, e.g., 'take some photos there.'