视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repetitions and filler sounds. Focus on correct verb forms and nouns (»take pictures«, »landscapes«, »nature«).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph landscapes and natural scenes because I like capturing light and colors. Also, I usually carry my own camera when I go hiking, so I can take photos whenever I see something interesting.

建议: Give a clear direct answer then support it with two specific reasons linked logically. Use correct prepositions and expressions (»born there«, »spent my childhood there«, »familiar with«). Avoid hesitations and vague phrases.

示例: I prefer urban views. I was born and raised in the city, so I feel very familiar with urban scenes. Also, I enjoy the architecture and busy streets because they offer more photo opportunities and interesting details.

建议: Answer directly and give specific reasons; correct grammar (»I haven't been abroad«, »a view in another country«, »one of my dreams«). Use linking words (»because«, »for example«, »so«) and avoid repetition. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I have never been abroad and I would like to experience different cultures and landscapes. For example, I dream of photographing famous landmarks and natural scenery around the world, and I hope to travel and do that in the future.

× Yes, of course I have a camera for on my own and I always taking picture about the landscape, what nature.

✓ Yes, of course I have my own camera and I always take pictures of landscapes and nature.

Original uses 'always taking' which incorrectly uses the -ing form instead of the simple present 'take' for habitual actions. 'Taking picture' should be plural 'take pictures' for general activity. 'about the landscape, what nature' is incorrect word choice and order; use 'of landscapes and nature'. Also 'a camera for on my own' is wrong order; use 'my own camera'. Suggestions: use simple present for habits, plural 'pictures' for general statements, and correct word order 'my own camera'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× Uh, I think the I think, I think the thing I take the picture a lot, uh, a lot is UH3B.

✓ I think the thing I take pictures of most is UH3B.

Original is disfluent and repeats phrases; restructure to a concise sentence. Use 'take pictures of' rather than 'take the picture' and 'most' to indicate frequency. Remove filler repetitions. Suggestions: eliminate repeated fragments, use correct verb-object order 'take pictures of X'. Grammar problem type ID:26

× 100% is urban because I was born in there and I spend time in their loss.

✓ I 100% prefer urban areas because I was born there and I spent my time there during my childhood.

'Born in there' and 'spent time in their loss' are incorrect. Use 'born there' without 'in'. 'Their' is wrong pronoun; probably intended 'there' or 'their hometown' and 'loss' is incorrect word. Use past tense 'spent' for completed past action and clarify time (e.g., 'during my childhood'). Suggestions: remove unnecessary prepositions and choose correct pronouns and nouns; use past tense when referring to past events. Grammar problem type ID:11

× So I have a lot of thing on my mind and when I want to, uh, I always want to see something, uh, I close with, familiar with.

✓ So I have a lot on my mind, and when I want to, I always want to see something I am familiar with.

'A lot of thing' should be 'a lot' or 'a lot of things'. 'I close with, familiar with' mixes incorrect phrase and punctuation; correct is 'I am familiar with' or 'that I am familiar with'. Suggestions: use correct noun forms ('things') and proper relative clause 'that I am familiar with' or 'I am familiar with'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× So I really prefer viewing, uh.

✓ So I really prefer viewing urban scenes.

Sentence is incomplete and vague; 'prefer viewing' is grammatical but needs an object. Add 'urban scenes' to match context. Suggestions: provide the object of 'viewing' to complete the thought. Grammar problem type ID:8

× I think I prefer view in other country because I haven't go to abroad any time, so I want to have a chance to see the view in other country.

✓ I think I prefer views in other countries because I haven't gone abroad yet, so I want a chance to see the views in other countries.

Use plural 'views' and 'countries' for general statements. 'Haven't go' is incorrect; use present perfect 'haven't gone'. 'Go to abroad' is wrong preposition; say 'gone abroad' or 'gone to other countries'. Also 'any time' is awkward; use 'yet'. Suggestions: use correct plural forms for generalization, correct present perfect 'haven't gone', and proper adverb 'yet'. Grammar problem type ID:1

× I want to see every country in the world is a one of my dream and I think I can do that in the future.

✓ Seeing every country in the world is one of my dreams, and I think I can do that in the future.

Original mixes clauses incorrectly. Use gerund 'Seeing' to make the clause subject, use 'one of my dreams' (not 'a one of my dream'), and keep 'in the future' for future intention. Suggestions: restructure using a gerund phrase and correct plural 'dreams'. Grammar problem type ID:6