视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), correct noun forms, and add one or two specific details using a linking word. Keep to under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they capture memories. For example, I often photograph my friends and my boyfriend when we travel, which helps me remember special moments. I also like candid shots because they feel natural and emotional.

建议: Avoid hesitations and grammar mistakes. Give a direct topic sentence, use plural/singular correctly (buildings), and finish sentences fully. Add a linking phrase and a specific reason or example. Keep it natural and within 3–4 sentences.

示例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the architecture and city atmosphere. For example, I live and work in central Tokyo, so I can easily take photos of skyscrapers and rooftops from high vantage points. These scenes energise me and offer interesting compositions.

建议: Clarify your meaning, correct tense and word choice, and avoid repetition. Start with a clear preference, give a specific reason and an example using linking words. Use correct past tense for past trips and name places correctly.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I love to explore different cultures and landscapes. For example, when I was at university I travelled around Europe and the USA, and I took many photos of historic streets and famous landmarks. These trips inspired my photography and broadened my perspective.

× Yes, I like taking pictures from different views because this photos remind me of my memories such as uh, for example I will take people photo, photo from friends, my boyfriend.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures from different views because these photos remind me of my memories. For example, I take photos of people, photos of friends, and my boyfriend.

Error: using 'this photos' is incorrect article/number agreement; should be 'these photos'. Also 'I will take people photo' and 'photo from friends' have article and pluralization issues. Suggestion: use 'these' with plural 'photos', use plural 'photos' and 'of' for relationships, and simplify tense to present habitual 'I take'.

× Umm, to be honest, I like views from urban areas because I like building, so the view of the building makes me excited.

✓ Umm, to be honest, I like views in urban areas because I like buildings, so the view of the buildings excites me.

Error: 'building' is singular but context requires plural 'buildings' or an article 'the building'. Also 'makes me excited' is acceptable but 'excites me' is more natural. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements ('buildings') and prefer active concise verbs ('excites').

× For example, I'm living in Tokyo and I I'm working in the center of Tokyo, so it is easy to take photo from the top of the.

✓ For example, I live in Tokyo and I work in the center of Tokyo, so it is easy to take photos from the top of buildings.

Errors: unnecessary progressive tense 'I'm living' and 'I'm working' when describing permanent facts—use simple present. 'take photo' should be plural 'take photos' and sentence ended abruptly 'top of the.' needs object ('buildings'). Suggestion: use simple present for habitual/permanent situations, pluralize countable nouns, and complete the noun phrase.

× I like being in other countries such as Europe and America because I live, I love travel all over the world and when I was in university I travel like police America and I like to take photo from there.

✓ I like being in other places such as Europe and America because I love to travel all over the world, and when I was at university I traveled around America and I liked to take photos there.

Errors: 'I live, I love travel' mixes forms; 'live' is wrong context. Use 'I love to travel'. 'When I was in university' is fine but 'I travel like police America' is unclear and incorrect—probably intended 'traveled around America'. Use past tense 'traveled' for past events. Also 'take photo' -> 'take photos'. Suggestion: use 'love to travel' for general preference, past simple for past actions, and correct verb phrases and plurals.