聊天— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is good but try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of saying 'I believe this is a way I communicate with them effectively than phone calls,' you can say 'I find chatting more effective than phone calls for keeping in touch.' Also, try to use linking words to make your answer flow better.

示例: Yes, I love chatting with friends because I find it more effective than phone calls for keeping in touch. Moreover, my friends are compassionate, and we often share updates or discuss various topics through chatting.

建议: Your answer has good content but needs to be more fluent and avoid fillers like 'umm umm'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, you can say 'Since most of my friends work in healthcare, we usually discuss our pharmacy practice, clinical conditions, and ways to improve patient care.'

示例: Since most of my friends work in healthcare, we usually discuss our pharmacy practice, clinical conditions, and ways to improve patient care. This helps us stay updated and support each other professionally.

建议: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using linking words and more precise vocabulary. For example, instead of 'substantial advice,' you can say 'meaningful advice.' Also, connect your ideas with words like 'because' and 'therefore' to improve coherence.

示例: I prefer chatting with only one friend because I believe too much advice can be misleading. Therefore, I usually confide in a close friend to get meaningful advice, which works best for me.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but needs better grammar and fluency. Avoid repeating phrases like 'I tend to.' Also, use linking words to connect your points. For example, 'Because I am shy, I feel uncomfortable in face-to-face conversations. Therefore, I prefer chatting on social media where I can express myself freely without distractions.'

示例: Because I am shy, I feel uncomfortable in face-to-face conversations. Therefore, I prefer chatting on social media where I can express myself freely without distractions.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and has hesitation. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and avoid fillers like 'umm.' For example, you can say, 'Yes, sometimes I argue with my friends because no friendship is perfect. However, I believe arguments help us understand each other better and improve our communication.'

示例: Yes, sometimes I argue with my friends because no friendship is perfect. However, I believe arguments help us understand each other better and improve our communication.

× I believe this is a way I communicate with them effectively than phone calls.

✓ I believe this is a way I communicate with them more effectively than through phone calls.

The original sentence lacks the preposition 'through' before 'phone calls' to indicate the means of communication. Also, 'more effectively' is needed to compare the effectiveness properly.

× My friends are very compassionate and they love chatting with me to share updates and or anything that is going.

✓ My friends are very compassionate and they love chatting with me to share updates or anything that is going on.

The phrase 'and or' is incorrect; it should be 'or' to indicate alternatives. Also, 'going' should be 'going on' to complete the phrasal verb meaning.

× We discuss about clinical conditions, we discuss about what's best for our patients and so on.

✓ We discuss clinical conditions, we discuss what's best for our patients and so on.

The verb 'discuss' does not require the preposition 'about'; it is directly followed by the object.

× I prefer to chat with only one friend if I am looking for a substantial advice because I believe too much advice can be misleading.

✓ I prefer to chat with only one friend if I am looking for substantial advice because I believe too much advice can be misleading.

'Advice' is an uncountable noun and does not take the article 'a'. Therefore, 'a substantial advice' is incorrect; it should be 'substantial advice'.

× I tend to I tend not to be composed when I'm talk to face to face.

✓ I tend to, I tend not to be composed when I'm talked to face to face.

The phrase 'I'm talk to' is incorrect; it should be 'I'm talked to' to use the passive voice correctly. Also, a comma is needed after the repeated phrase for clarity.

× I would rather I chat with the person on social media because it means me to be free and I can talk whatever I want to say without being distracted.

✓ I would rather chat with the person on social media because it allows me to be free and I can say whatever I want without being distracted.

The phrase 'it means me to be free' is incorrect; it should be 'it allows me to be free'. Also, 'talk whatever I want to say' is better expressed as 'say whatever I want'.

× No friendship is perfect.

✓ No friendship is perfect.

This sentence is correct as it stands; 'friendship' is an uncountable noun here and correctly used in singular form.

× I believe the argument is suppose to make us more umm how would I put it? Supposed to make us understand ourself properly and to allow us to communicate effectively.

✓ I believe the argument is supposed to make us more, umm, how would I put it? Supposed to make us understand ourselves properly and to allow us to communicate effectively.

'Suppose' should be 'supposed' to indicate obligation or expectation. Also, 'ourself' is incorrect; the correct reflexive pronoun for plural 'us' is 'ourselves'.