聊天— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, say "it makes me feel connected" instead of "makes me to feel connected" and avoid repeating "friends" unnecessarily. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

示例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends because it helps me feel connected, especially with those living in different countries. Thanks to social media platforms like WhatsApp and Telegram, I can easily keep in touch with them.

建议: Avoid repetition and grammatical mistakes like "makes me to feel". Use linking words such as "because" or "so" to connect ideas. Also, be more specific about the memories to enrich your answer.

示例: We talk about many things, but mostly I enjoy discussing our childhood memories in our neighborhood because it makes me feel relaxed and connected to my friends.

建议: Work on sentence clarity and grammar. For example, say "I prefer chatting with only one friend because I don't easily interact with people I don't know." Use linking words like "because" and avoid run-on sentences.

示例: I prefer chatting with only one friend because I don't easily interact with people I don't know. Talking to close friends makes me feel confident to express myself.

建议: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Try to organize your ideas clearly using linking words. For example, explain why chatting saves time and why being an introvert makes chatting easier than face-to-face communication.

示例: I prefer communicating via chat because it saves time. Also, as an introvert, I find it easier to express myself through messages than face-to-face conversations.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical errors. Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words like "for example" and "but" properly. Also, avoid repetition and clarify your points.

示例: Yes, I sometimes argue with my friends on relevant topics. For example, last week we discussed the importance of online teaching. She tried to persuade me to accept her point of view, but I disagreed because I believe that traditional teaching has its own benefits.

× This is because it makes me to feel connected with my friends, especially those that are in a different countries.

✓ This is because it makes me feel connected with my friends, especially those that are in different countries.

The verb 'makes' should be followed directly by the base form of the verb without 'to'. Using 'to feel' after 'makes me' is incorrect. Also, 'a different countries' is incorrect because 'countries' is plural and should not have 'a'.

× especially those that are in a different countries.

✓ especially those that are in different countries.

The preposition 'in' is correct, but the article 'a' before 'different countries' is incorrect because 'countries' is plural. The article should be removed.

× With the use of social platforms, social media platforms like WhatsApp, Telegram, I can be able to communicate with them.

✓ With the use of social media platforms like WhatsApp and Telegram, I am able to communicate with them.

The phrase 'can be able to' is redundant. Use either 'can' or 'am able to'. Also, 'social platforms, social media platforms' is repetitive; 'social media platforms' suffices.

× especially those that are in a different countries.

✓ especially those that are in different countries.

The phrase 'a different countries' is incorrect because 'countries' is plural and cannot be preceded by the singular article 'a'.

× I mostly talk about our childhood memory in in our neighborhood with my friends.

✓ I mostly talk about our childhood memories in our neighborhood with my friends.

The word 'memory' should be plural 'memories' because it refers to multiple recollections. Also, there is a repeated preposition 'in in' which should be corrected to a single 'in'.

× This makes me to feel relaxed and connected each time I talk about my past memory with my friends moreover.

✓ This makes me feel relaxed and connected each time I talk about my past memories with my friends.

After 'makes me', the verb should be in base form without 'to'. 'Past memory' should be plural 'past memories' to match the context. The word 'moreover' is unnecessary and awkward here.

× I mostly talk about our childhood memory in in our neighborhood with my friends.

✓ I mostly talk about our childhood memories in our neighborhood with my friends.

The repeated preposition 'in in' is incorrect; it should be a single 'in'.

× But talking with my friends who I know very well and I can easily predict their mood gives me the confidence to express myself very well that I'm talking with.

✓ But talking with my friends whom I know very well and whose moods I can easily predict gives me the confidence to express myself very well.

The relative pronoun 'who' should be 'whom' as the object of 'know'. Also, 'that I'm talking with' is redundant and awkward; better to omit it. 'Their mood' should be 'whose moods' to correctly relate to 'friends'.

× Actually, I enjoy communicating via chat through chatting.

✓ Actually, I enjoy communicating through chatting.

The phrase 'communicating via chat through chatting' is redundant. 'Communicating through chatting' is sufficient and correct.

× This is because it serves a lot of time and they I'm a I'm I'm an introvert so I find it quite easy to express myself if I'm chatting with people that I'm talking to that I'm talking face to face.

✓ This is because it saves a lot of time and I am an introvert, so I find it quite easy to express myself when chatting with people rather than talking face to face.

'Serves a lot of time' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'saves a lot of time'. The sentence has repeated and confusing pronouns and phrases which need to be simplified for clarity. 'If I'm chatting with people that I'm talking to that I'm talking face to face' is incorrect and confusing; it should be 'when chatting with people rather than talking face to face'.

× Talking face to face limits my ability to to.

✓ Talking face to face limits my ability to express myself.

The sentence is incomplete and has repeated 'to to'. It should be completed properly to convey the intended meaning.

× Actually, I argue with my friends on relevance topics, especially for instance, I remember last week when I was communicating with my when I was discussing with my friends on the importance of online teaching and she was persuading me to to admit to her own points of view.

✓ Actually, I argue with my friends on relevant topics. For instance, I remember last week when I was discussing with my friends the importance of online teaching, and she was persuading me to admit her own points of view.

The phrase 'on relevance topics' should be 'on relevant topics'. 'Communicating with my when I was discussing with my friends' is redundant and incorrect; 'discussing with my friends' suffices. 'Persuading me to to admit to her own points of view' has repeated 'to' and incorrect preposition; it should be 'persuading me to admit her own points of view'.