博物馆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: My brother, your answer dey try but e get some wahala. You need to make your answer clear and direct. Try to start with a clear opinion, then add one or two specific reasons. Also, avoid repeating words and make your sentences shorter and more natural. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect your ideas well.

示例: Yes, I think museums are very important because they help us learn about our history and culture. For example, tourists visit museums to see ancient artifacts and learn about our heroes. I also enjoy museums that show ancient civilizations like the Greeks and their traditions.

建议: You need to answer the question directly first, then give clear supporting details. Also, be careful with pronunciation and names to avoid confusion. Try to use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to show contrast. Keep your sentences simple and clear to make your point easy to understand.

示例: There are not many museums in my hometown, but I remember visiting one in Abeokuta when I was young. It showed interesting things like ancient rocks and stories about the heroes who helped build the city.

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to give a direct answer first, then explain why you visit museums, using clear and simple sentences. Avoid repeating words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect your ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I often visit museums because they help me relax and learn about history. For example, I enjoy seeing old inventions and artifacts that tell stories about the past.

建议: Your answer has good details but some parts are confusing and repetitive. Try to organize your answer with a clear timeline and avoid repeating words. Also, be careful with word choice to avoid confusion, for example, 'ignorance' is not correct here. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to make your story flow better.

示例: The last time I visited a museum was when I was 15 years old. My mum took me there for my birthday because I kept asking her to go. We spent a week in Abeokuta visiting the famous Rock Age Museum, which displays many interesting rocks and fossils.

× As of now, people go to the museum, for example, the tourists, the foreigners that come to Nigeria, they want to know our ancient things that happen in the past, our old people, our our heroes, then in the past, they want to know about them.

✓ As of now, people go to museums, for example, tourists and foreigners who come to Nigeria; they want to know about our ancient things that happened in the past, our old people, our heroes, and so on.

The word 'museum' should be plural 'museums' because it refers to a general category, not a single museum. Also, 'the tourists, the foreigners' should be 'tourists and foreigners' without 'the' to indicate general groups. 'Things that happen' should be 'things that happened' to match past tense.

× As of now, people go to the museum, for example, the tourists, the foreigners that come to Nigeria, they want to know our ancient things that happen in the past, our old people, our our heroes, then in the past, they want to know about them.

✓ As of now, people go to museums, for example, tourists and foreigners who come to Nigeria; they want to know about our ancient things that happened in the past, our old people, our heroes, and so on.

The phrase 'things that happen in the past' is incorrect because 'happen' is present tense; it should be 'happened' to correctly refer to past events.

× For me, I would like to go to the museum to watch about all those anthropology things, those ancient Greek gods, the Olympics, I would like to watch them.

✓ For me, I would like to go to the museum to learn about all those anthropology things, those ancient Greek gods, the Olympics; I would like to see them.

The verb 'watch' is incorrectly used with 'about'; 'watch' is for viewing moving images or events. The correct verbs are 'learn about' for gaining knowledge and 'see' for viewing exhibits.

× Apparently museums are not that much in Nigeria, but I know when I was little I went to the museum in Abel Kutta.

✓ Apparently, museums are not that many in Nigeria, but I know when I was little I went to a museum in Abeokuta.

The phrase 'not that much' is incorrect when referring to countable nouns like 'museums'; it should be 'not that many'. Also, 'the museum' should be 'a museum' because it is not specified. The place name is corrected to 'Abeokuta'.

× I went to look at the rocks, the way new Abercrowd was built, the ancients, the ancient heroes that helped Abel Kuta come up as it's well known place.

✓ I went to look at the rocks, the way New Abeokuta was built, the ancients, the ancient heroes who helped Abeokuta become a well-known place.

The phrase 'come up as it's well known place' is incorrect; it should be 'become a well-known place'. Also, 'the way new Abercrowd was built' likely refers to 'New Abeokuta'. 'Who' is used for people, not 'that' in this context.

× Yes, apparently museum has always been a place to calm myself checking out old things, and it has been a place for inventions of old ancient stuff and knowing much about holding days and how to like how to be more historical on things that hold.

✓ Yes, apparently museums have always been places to calm myself by checking out old things, and they have been places for inventions of old ancient stuff and learning much about old days and how to be more historical about things that happened.

The singular 'museum' should be plural 'museums' to match the general meaning. 'Has' changes to 'have' for plural subject. 'Place' changes to 'places'. The phrase 'holding days' is unclear and corrected to 'old days'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity.

× Yes, apparently museum has always been a place to calm myself checking out old things, and it has been a place for inventions of old ancient stuff and knowing much about holding days and how to like how to be more historical on things that hold.

✓ Yes, apparently museums have always been places to calm myself by checking out old things, and they have been places for inventions of old ancient stuff and learning much about old days and how to be more historical about things that happened.

The phrase 'calm myself checking out old things' needs the preposition 'by' to indicate the means. Also, 'more historical on things' should be 'more historical about things'.

× I visited the museum when I was 15 with my mum.

✓ I visited a museum when I was 15 with my mum.

The article 'the' is incorrect here because it is not a specific museum previously mentioned; 'a museum' is appropriate. The tense is correct.

× My mum took me there because I often always disturb her.

✓ My mum took me there because I often disturb her.

The phrase 'often always' is redundant; 'often' alone is sufficient. The pronouns are correct.

× Mum, when are you going to take me to the museum? So she decided take me on my birthday.

✓ Mum, when are you going to take me to the museum? So she decided to take me on my birthday.

The verb 'decided' should be followed by the infinitive 'to take' to be grammatically correct.

× So we spent a week in Abel Kuta exploring their known well known museum named the Rock Age of Rock Age Museum.

✓ So we spent a week in Abeokuta exploring their well-known museum named the Rock Age Museum.

The phrase 'their known well known museum' is redundant; 'well-known museum' suffices. The place name corrected to 'Abeokuta'. The museum name simplified for clarity.

× It's about rocks ignorance.

✓ It's about rocks and their origins.

The phrase 'rocks ignorance' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended to mean 'rocks and their origins' or 'rock formations'.