图书馆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Apni uttor e kichu bhul grammar o word choice korechen. Apnar uttor ke aro natural o sohoje bujha jabe jodi apni simple o shothik sentence structure babohar koren. Apni 'in order to' bar bar babohar korchen, eta avoid korun. Apnar uttor e kichu redundancy ache, jemon 'horror horror stories'. Apni specific example dite paren jemon kon dhoroner books apni porte bhalo pan. Apnar uttor ke 4-5 sentence er modhye rakhun.

示例: Yes, I often go to the library because I believe it helps me improve my general knowledge. Whenever I feel tired, I like to read books about history or horror stories to relax and lift my mood.

建议: Apnar uttor e kichu grammar o linking word er obhab ache. Apni 'This because' er jaygay 'This is because' ba 'Because' babohar korte paren. Apni uttor ke aro logical korte linking words babohar korun. Apni specific example dite paren je kon dhoroner history books porte bhalo pan. Apnar uttor ke 4-5 sentence er modhye rakhun.

示例: When I go to the library, I usually read history books. This is because, as a science student, I believe learning history can help me understand the development of science better. For example, reading about famous scientists inspires me to work hard.

建议: Apnar uttor e grammar o sentence structure khub important. Apni 'This because' er jaygay 'This is because' babohar korun. Apnar last sentence ta clear na, eta ke sohoje o shothik vabe bolte hobe. Apni uttor ke 4-5 sentence er modhye rakhun o proshner uttor direct din.

示例: Honestly, I never went to the library when I was a kid because my parents did not allow me to go outside. They were worried that I might get into trouble or someone might kidnap me. So, I stayed at home most of the time.

建议: Apnar uttor e onek grammar o coherence er problem ache. Apni 'All over I know' er jaygay 'As far as I know' babohar korun. Apnar last sentence ta irrelevant o incomplete. Apni uttor ke shothik sentence structure e rakhun o proshner uttor direct din. Apni specific example dite paren.

示例: As far as I know, Chinese kids often go to libraries because they believe it helps improve their academic performance and general knowledge. For example, many schools encourage students to spend time reading in the library.

× Yes, I do often go library this because I strongly believe that it plays a vital role in enhancing my general knowledge.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library because I strongly believe that it plays a vital role in enhancing my general knowledge.

The sentence has incorrect word order and missing preposition. 'Do often go library this' is incorrect; the adverb 'often' should come after 'do' or before the verb, and 'go library' needs the preposition 'to'. Also, 'this' is misplaced and unnecessary here. Correct word order and prepositions improve clarity.

× Yes, I do often go library this because I strongly believe that it plays a vital role in enhancing my general knowledge.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library because I strongly believe that it plays a vital role in enhancing my general knowledge.

The phrase 'go library' is incorrect; the verb 'go' requires the preposition 'to' before a place. So, it should be 'go to the library'.

× Moreover, whenever I feel exhausted, I just go there in order to in order to read some books about like history, cow or horror horror stories which can be beneficial for me to enhance my mood.

✓ Moreover, whenever I feel exhausted, I just go there to read some books about history, cow, or horror stories which can be beneficial for enhancing my mood.

The phrase 'in order to in order to' is redundant; only one 'in order to' or simply 'to' is needed. Also, 'about like history, cow or horror horror stories' is awkward; 'like' is unnecessary and 'cow' is unclear in this context. The repetition 'horror horror' is a mistake. Correcting these improves sentence clarity and grammar.

× After arriving the library, I tend to read books about history.

✓ After arriving at the library, I tend to read books about history.

The verb 'arrive' is usually followed by the preposition 'at' when referring to a place like 'library'. So, it should be 'arriving at the library'.

× This is because as a student of science, I think it can be advantageous for me to enhance my knowledge about science.

✓ This is because, as a student of science, I think it is advantageous for me to enhance my knowledge about science.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'I think'. Adding 'it is' clarifies the subject and predicate, improving sentence structure.

× This because if I need to become a doctor or an engineer, it can be beneficial for me to gain sufficient experience.

✓ This is because if I want to become a doctor or an engineer, it can be beneficial for me to gain sufficient experience.

The phrase 'This because' is incomplete; it should be 'This is because' to form a complete sentence. Also, 'need to become' is better expressed as 'want to become' in this context.

× Honestly, I never went to any library when I was a kid.

✓ Honestly, I never went to any library when I was a kid.

This sentence is correct in past tense; no correction needed.

× This because my parents did not allow me to go outside let alone going to library.

✓ This is because my parents did not allow me to go outside, let alone go to the library.

'This because' is incomplete; it should be 'This is because'. Also, 'let alone going to library' should be 'let alone go to the library' for parallel structure and correct article usage.

× This because my parents did not allow me to go outside let alone going to library.

✓ This is because my parents did not allow me to go outside, let alone go to the library.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place known to both speaker and listener.

× This because they considered that I made I may become a sluggish or bad person or someone else will kidnap me that's.

✓ This is because they thought I might become a sluggish or bad person, or that someone else might kidnap me.

The sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. 'This because' should be 'This is because'. 'They considered that I made I may become' is incorrect; it should be 'they thought I might become'. The phrase 'that's' at the end is unnecessary and unclear. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.

× All over I know I saw on the Internet that Chinese kids are crazy to go in the libraries because they believe that it can be beneficial for them to improve their academic performance or general knowledge.

✓ As far as I know, I saw on the Internet that Chinese kids are crazy about going to libraries because they believe it can be beneficial for improving their academic performance or general knowledge.

The phrase 'crazy to go in the libraries' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'crazy about going to libraries'. Also, 'go in the libraries' should be 'go to libraries'. 'All over I know' is incorrect; 'As far as I know' is appropriate.

× To illustrate, a few days ago I saw that. Bro, come on.

✓ To illustrate, a few days ago I saw that. (The rest is informal and unrelated.)

The phrase 'Bro, come on.' is informal and does not fit the context. It should be omitted or replaced with a relevant continuation. The sentence is incomplete and unclear.