图书馆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to make your response more direct and concise, for example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

示例: I often go to the library when I have upcoming exams because it provides useful resources and a quiet environment that helps me concentrate better on my studies.

建议: Your answer has good points but is a bit repetitive and some sentences are incomplete or awkward. Try to use linking words like 'also' and 'because' to connect ideas smoothly, and avoid starting sentences with 'and'. Make your sentences more natural and concise.

示例: I usually study in the library because the quiet environment helps me concentrate better. Also, it makes me feel more motivated and relaxed, which reduces my stress while studying.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your ideas logically and use correct grammar. Avoid informal phrases like 'like abuse the computer'. Be specific and explain clearly what you did at the library as a child.

示例: Yes, I sometimes went to the library as a child, but I did not study seriously. I mainly used the computers there to play games, although this was sometimes not allowed.

建议: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid repetition. Also, make your sentences more natural and fluent.

示例: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library because they face many exams and intense competition for university admission. Therefore, they need a quiet place to concentrate without distractions.

× Sometimes when the when I have some incoming exam, I would often go to library for some resources research for an auxiliary study program and it could also help me to improve my more concentrate on study.

✓ Sometimes when I have some incoming exams, I often go to the library for some resource research for an auxiliary study program and it could also help me to improve my concentration on study.

The phrase 'resources research' is incorrect; 'resource research' is more appropriate. Also, 'more concentrate' should be 'concentration' as 'concentrate' is a verb, but here a noun is needed. 'Go to library' lacks the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'would often go' is better as 'often go' to match the present tense context. The repeated 'when the when' is a redundancy and should be corrected to 'when'.

× Sometimes when the when I have some incoming exam, I would often go to library for some resources research for an auxiliary study program and it could also help me to improve my more concentrate on study.

✓ Sometimes when I have some incoming exams, I often go to the library for some resource research for an auxiliary study program and it could also help me to improve my concentration on study.

The phrase 'go to library' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'library'. In English, when referring to a specific place like 'library', the definite article is required. Also, 'incoming exam' should be plural 'incoming exams' to match the context.

× I would often go to library for some resources research for an auxiliary study program and it could also help me to improve my more concentrate on study.

✓ I often go to the library for some resource research for an auxiliary study program and it could also help me to improve my concentration on study.

The phrase 'go to library' requires the definite article 'the' before 'library' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'resources research' should be 'resource research' as 'resource' acts as an adjective here.

× And I usually study in the library because it gives me more sense of belonging of study, and it could also help me be more concentrated since the environment is quiet and more freedom.

✓ I usually study in the library because it gives me more sense of belonging to study, and it could also help me be more concentrated since the environment is quiet and freer.

The phrase 'sense of belonging of study' is incorrect; it should be 'sense of belonging to study'. Also, 'more freedom' is better expressed as 'freer' to describe the environment. The sentence starts with 'And' which is acceptable in spoken English but can be omitted for formality.

× And I usually study in the library because it gives me more sense of belonging of study, and it could also help me be more concentrated since the environment is quiet and more freedom.

✓ I usually study in the library because it gives me more sense of belonging to study, and it could also help me be more concentrated since the environment is quiet and freer.

The preposition 'of' after 'belonging' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'to' in this context. Also, 'more freedom' should be 'freer' to correctly describe the environment's quality.

× Umm yes sometimes but I don't think I study hard when I was young so I used to be able to library just for some gaming course and Hong Kong library you should have some computers so we can like abuse the computer to play some games which is sometimes not allowed in.

✓ Umm yes sometimes but I don't think I studied hard when I was young so I used to go to the library just for some gaming courses and Hong Kong libraries have some computers so we can use the computers to play some games which is sometimes not allowed.

The phrase 'I don't think I study hard when I was young' mixes present and past tense; it should be 'I don't think I studied hard when I was young'. 'Used to be able to library' is incorrect; it should be 'used to go to the library'. 'Gaming course' should be plural 'gaming courses' if referring to multiple. 'You should have' is incorrect; 'have' is better. 'Abuse the computer' is inappropriate; 'use the computers' is better. The sentence is long and needs clearer structure.

× Umm yes sometimes but I don't think I study hard when I was young so I used to be able to library just for some gaming course and Hong Kong library you should have some computers so we can like abuse the computer to play some games which is sometimes not allowed in.

✓ Umm yes sometimes but I don't think I studied hard when I was young so I used to go to the library just for some gaming courses and Hong Kong libraries have some computers so we can use the computers to play some games which is sometimes not allowed.

The phrase 'go to library' requires the definite article 'the'. Also, 'Hong Kong library' should be plural 'Hong Kong libraries' if referring generally. 'Abuse the computer' is incorrect; 'use the computers' is appropriate.

× Umm yes sometimes but I don't think I study hard when I was young so I used to be able to library just for some gaming course and Hong Kong library you should have some computers so we can like abuse the computer to play some games which is sometimes not allowed in.

✓ Umm yes sometimes but I don't think I studied hard when I was young so I used to go to the library just for some gaming courses and Hong Kong libraries have some computers so we can use the computers to play some games which is sometimes not allowed.

'Gaming course' should be plural 'gaming courses' to match the context. 'Hong Kong library' should be plural 'Hong Kong libraries' if referring to multiple libraries.

× Yeah, they do often go to library. I think most of the reason because they have lots of exams and they have lots of stress of considering to university and it is very competitive.

✓ Yeah, they often go to the library. I think most of the reason is because they have lots of exams and lots of stress when considering university and it is very competitive.

'Go to library' requires the definite article 'the'. 'Most of the reason' should be 'most of the reason is' or better 'the main reason is'. 'Stress of considering to university' is incorrect; it should be 'stress when considering university'.

× Yeah, they do often go to library. I think most of the reason because they have lots of exams and they have lots of stress of considering to university and it is very competitive.

✓ Yeah, they often go to the library. I think the main reason is that they have lots of exams and lots of stress when considering university and it is very competitive.

The preposition 'of' after 'stress' is incorrect; 'when considering university' is the correct phrase. Also, 'considering to university' is incorrect; 'considering university' is correct.