图书馆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Votre réponse est claire mais pourrait être plus naturelle et concise. Évitez les répétitions comme "to read and to concentrate" qui sont similaires. Utilisez des phrases plus fluides et naturelles en anglais.

示例: Yes, I often go to the library because it offers a quiet environment and a wide range of textbooks that help me focus on my studies.

建议: Votre réponse est un peu longue et manque de cohérence. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour organiser vos idées et évitez les expressions vagues comme "and all of that". Soyez plus précis et structuré.

示例: In the library, I usually study textbooks related to medicine, especially biology. Sometimes, I also read about chemistry, although I don't enjoy it much. Occasionally, I explore books about technology, such as mobile phones.

建议: Votre réponse est bonne mais contient quelques erreurs grammaticales et formulations maladroites. Simplifiez vos phrases et corrigez la grammaire pour plus de clarté.

示例: I did not go to the library as a child because my primary school did not have one. However, in secondary school, I was lucky to attend a school that had a library.

建议: Votre réponse manque de fluidité et contient des erreurs. Évitez les répétitions et améliorez la structure en utilisant des mots de liaison. Soyez plus direct et naturel.

示例: Although I'm not Chinese, I believe that many Chinese children visit libraries regularly. I've seen videos online showing them studying there, but I don't have personal experience to say more.

× Yes, I got the library for better study purposes since it contains more textbooks and it's a quiet place to read and to concentrate.

✓ Yes, I go to the library for better study purposes since it contains more textbooks and it's a quiet place to read and to concentrate.

The student used 'got' which is past tense, but the question asks about a habitual action ('Do you often go'). The correct verb tense here is present simple 'go' to indicate a regular activity.

× Yes, I got the library for better study purposes since it contains more textbooks and it's a quiet place to read and to concentrate.

✓ Yes, I go to the library for better study purposes since it contains more textbooks and it's a quiet place to read and to concentrate.

The phrase 'got the library' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'go to the library' to indicate visiting a place.

× In the library, I go through a wide range of textbooks.

✓ In the library, I go through a wide range of textbooks.

This sentence is correct; 'go through' is appropriately used to mean reviewing or reading textbooks.

× Basically, I love medicine, so I study textbooks that are related to biology, at times chemistry, though I'm not so fond of chemistry, and at times I just look at textbooks that are related to phone and all of that.

✓ Basically, I love medicine, so I study textbooks that are related to biology, sometimes chemistry, though I'm not so fond of chemistry, and sometimes I just look at textbooks that are related to phones and all of that.

The phrase 'at times' is better replaced with 'sometimes' for naturalness. Also, 'related to phone' should be 'related to phones' (plural) because it refers to the general subject of phones.

× ...and at times I just look at textbooks that are related to phone and all of that.

✓ ...and sometimes I just look at textbooks that are related to phones and all of that.

The noun 'phone' should be plural 'phones' because it refers to the general category or subject, not a single phone.

× As a kid I did not visit the library because in my local school I we did not have a library and so it was difficult talking about one at that time.

✓ As a kid I did not visit the library because in my local school we did not have a library and so it was difficult talking about one at that time.

The phrase 'I we did not have' contains an extra pronoun 'I' which is incorrect. Removing 'I' corrects the sentence.

× As a kid I did not visit the library because in my local school I we did not have a library and so it was difficult talking about one at that time.

✓ As a kid I did not visit the library because in my local school we did not have a library and so it was difficult talking about one at that time.

The pronoun 'I' before 'we' is redundant and incorrect; only 'we' should be used as the subject.

× However, during my years in the secondary school, I was opportune to be found in a school where a library was present.

✓ However, during my years in secondary school, I was fortunate to be in a school where a library was present.

The phrase 'I was opportune to be found in a school' is awkward and incorrect. 'I was fortunate to be in a school' is the correct expression. Also, 'in the secondary school' should be 'in secondary school' without 'the'.

× I'm not from Chinese, however I believe that Chinese kids do go to the library.

✓ I'm not Chinese, however I believe that Chinese kids do go to the library.

The phrase 'I'm not from Chinese' is incorrect. The correct form is 'I'm not Chinese' to indicate nationality or ethnicity.

× From the videos we see in the Internet, these children do visit the library, but I cannot say more concerning this issue given that I'm not of Chinese and I do not have people in my surrounding that are Chinese.

✓ From the videos we see on the Internet, these children do visit the library, but I cannot say more concerning this issue given that I'm not Chinese and I do not have people in my surroundings who are Chinese.

The correct preposition is 'on the Internet' not 'in the Internet'. Also, 'I'm not of Chinese' is incorrect; it should be 'I'm not Chinese'. 'People in my surrounding' should be 'people in my surroundings'. The relative pronoun 'that' is better replaced with 'who' when referring to people.