图书馆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat natural but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "I hardly like to move out my house" and "even the general or the books." Try to use clearer and more natural expressions. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas more effectively. Use linking words like "because" and "however" properly to connect your ideas logically.

示例: No, I don't often go to the library because I prefer staying at home. Most books and information are available online nowadays. However, I do visit the library occasionally when I need a book that is not available on the Internet.

建议: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by correcting grammar and making sentences more concise. For example, avoid repeating "available" and use linking words like "also" or "in addition" to connect ideas smoothly. Try to start with a clear topic sentence and then add supporting details.

示例: I rarely visit the library, but when I do, it's usually to borrow books that are not available online. In addition, I like to use the free printing services and Wi-Fi that the library offers.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing, such as "there is no such opportunity available" and "I don't get a chance." Try to use past tense consistently and avoid filler words like "I guess." Also, avoid unnecessary repetition and keep sentences clear and concise.

示例: No, I did not go to the library as a child because I grew up in a village without a library nearby. The closest library was about five kilometers away, so I rarely had the chance to visit it.

建议: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using more natural expressions and clearer sentence structures. For example, say "From what I have heard" instead of "As much as I heard." Also, avoid vague phrases like "those are tech savvy people" and instead say "they are tech-savvy." Use linking words like "because" and "therefore" to connect ideas logically.

示例: From what I have heard, Chinese children do not often visit libraries because they have easy access to the Internet and Wi-Fi. Therefore, they rely more on digital resources since they are quite tech-savvy.

× I hardly like to move out my house to do anything.

✓ I hardly like to move out of my house to do anything.

The preposition 'out' should be followed by 'of' when indicating leaving a place. So, 'move out of my house' is correct, not 'move out my house'.

× Moreover, everything nowadays is available on the Internet, even the general or the books.

✓ Moreover, everything nowadays is available on the Internet, even the general books or the books.

The phrase 'the general or the books' is unclear and incorrect. It should be 'the general books or the books' to make sense. Also, 'the' is unnecessary before 'general' unless specifying particular books.

× However, there are some books that are only available in library for that I have to visit.

✓ However, there are some books that are only available in the library, so I have to visit.

The phrase 'in library' requires the definite article 'the' to become 'in the library'. Also, 'for that I have to visit' is awkward; 'so I have to visit' is more natural.

× if I need a specific book that is not available digitally, I do visit a library occasionally to borrow it.

✓ if I need a specific book that is not available digitally, I do visit the library occasionally to borrow it.

When referring to a specific place known to both speaker and listener, 'the library' is used instead of 'a library'.

× Moreover, there are many specific options are available like the free printing options and free Wi-Fi available, so I like to visit for that.

✓ Moreover, there are many specific options available, like free printing and free Wi-Fi, so I like to visit for that.

The sentence has redundant verbs 'are' and 'available' together. Removing 'are' before 'available' corrects the sentence structure. Also, 'the free printing options and free Wi-Fi available' is better as 'free printing and free Wi-Fi'.

× No, I didn't visit any library when I was a kid because I grew up in my village and there is no such opportunity available in my area.

✓ No, I didn't visit any library when I was a kid because I grew up in my village and there was no such opportunity available in my area.

The sentence refers to the past, so 'there is' should be changed to past tense 'there was' to maintain tense consistency.

× And the nearest library that is available to my home is I guess 5 kilometer from the village.

✓ And the nearest library that is available to my home is, I guess, 5 kilometers from the village.

The phrase 'available to my home' is incorrect; 'available near my home' or 'closest to my home' is better. Also, '5 kilometer' should be plural '5 kilometers'. Adding commas around 'I guess' improves readability.

× So I don't get a chance to visit any library in UMM in my childhood.

✓ So I didn't get a chance to visit any library in UMM during my childhood.

The sentence refers to past time, so 'don't get' should be 'didn't get'. Also, 'in my childhood' is better expressed as 'during my childhood'.

× As much as I heard about their technological innovations, I believe the Chinese kids don't often visit the library because they have a high level of Wi-Fi and information available over the Internet.

✓ As far as I have heard about their technological innovations, I believe Chinese kids don't often visit the library because they have a high level of Wi-Fi and information available over the Internet.

The phrase 'As much as I heard' is incorrect; 'As far as I have heard' is the correct idiomatic expression. Also, 'the Chinese kids' is better as 'Chinese kids' when speaking generally.