列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail and an example. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and correct the phrase about forgetting — say it helps prevent forgetting. Use one or two linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me remember everything I need. For example, last week I saved time by checking my list and avoiding unnecessary purchases.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence and finish your supporting detail with a complete example. Remove hesitation and correct grammar (e.g., "we call it SOAP" or the correct term). Use linking words like "so" or "for example" and be specific about how it helps (timing, tasks).

示例: Yes, we use a written checklist at work because it helps us organize tasks and avoid mistakes. For example, the list reminds us of scheduled medications and reduces the chance of missed doses.

建议: Open with a direct statement, then explain the reason clearly and concisely. Avoid repetitions and hesitations. Use a linking word like "because" and give a brief specific example or contrast to show understanding of different preferences.

示例: Some people dislike lists because they enjoy working under pressure and find it more motivating. For instance, my father performs better when he improvises tasks rather than following a schedule.

建议: Give a concise preference sentence, then one clear reason with a specific example. Remove filler words and correct unclear phrasing (e.g., "you can erase and edit easily" and "rewriting on paper can make it messy"). Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

示例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I can edit them easily and keep everything neat. For example, I update my grocery list during the week and sync it across devices so I never forget an item.

× Yes, I have a list whenever I go shopping. Uh, making a list or planning ahead of time before going or before doing something uh, makes you prepared and uh, purpose is to forget things when you are in the market already.

✓ Yes, I have a list whenever I go shopping. Making a list or planning ahead of time before going or doing something makes you prepared and helps you avoid forgetting things when you are already at the market.

Error type 10: The original contains awkward verb forms and an incorrect noun 'purpose is to forget things'. 'Helps you avoid forgetting' uses the correct present participle (forgetting) and a clear verb phrase 'helps you avoid' to express prevention. Also reworded 'when you are in the market already' to 'when you are already at the market' for natural preposition use.

× Yes, we have a list uh, as nurses we called it umm Espar. It helps us to plan our work in time and tend to help not to forget things we need we needed to do. For example, we tend to give medication on certain.

✓ Yes, we have a list. As nurses, we call it Espar. It helps us plan our work on time and prevents us from forgetting things we need to do. For example, we tend to give medication at certain times.

Error type 17 (and related issues): 'called' should be present 'call' to match habitual present. Removed unnecessary article and fixed sentence structure. 'Plan our work in time' corrected to 'plan our work on time'. 'Tend to help not to forget' was ungrammatical; replaced with 'prevents us from forgetting'. Added 'times' after 'certain' and preposition 'at' for correct collocation.

× Some people like my father, uh, prefers not having a list because they like the pressure and it makes them challenge, uh, it challenges them to be able to do the work ahead of time even though they don't have any list.

✓ Some people, like my father, prefer not to have a list because they like the pressure; it challenges them to complete the work on time even though they don't have a list.

Error type 6 and 27: Subject-verb agreement and tense mix: 'Some people ... prefers' is incorrect; use 'prefer'. 'Not having a list' is acceptable but 'prefer not to have a list' is more natural. Removed redundancy and fixed 'it makes them challenge' to 'it challenges them' and 'ahead of time' to 'on time' for clarity.

× I prefer making a list on my phone because, uh, in your phone you can erase it and just type it again, while on the paper you you can redo it without, uh, doing shade on your paper and it makes the paper dirty.

✓ I prefer making a list on my phone because on your phone you can erase it and type it again, while on paper you can only cross things out, which makes the paper look messy.

Error type 11: Incorrect prepositions and awkward phrasing: 'in your phone' and 'on the paper' corrected to 'on your phone' and 'on paper'. 'Redo it without doing shade' is not natural; replaced with 'only cross things out' and 'makes the paper look messy' to convey intended meaning. Also removed duplicate 'you'.

× It helps us to plan our work in time and tend to help not to forget things we need we needed to do.

✓ It helps us plan our work on time and prevents us from forgetting the things we need to do.

Error type 2: The original mixes verb forms and tenses and lacks correct third-person verb forms for 'prevent'. 'Tend to help not to forget' is incorrect; 'prevents us from forgetting' uses the correct third-person singular form and a proper verb pattern. Also fixed 'in time' to 'on time' and removed duplicated 'we needed'.